Writing Silence

[wiccansamurai]

Deep voice
but shallow lips.
Skeleotons buried
in closets of mist.

A heart of fool's gold
Shining with gray light.
Fists pounding
With surrendering fight

Every time I fell apart
I turned to find no one
And I was left
With no where to run

Quietly I scream
And stilly I shake
Waiting for someone to hear
The sound I dare not make

[maikiratori]

I envy you for your talent in rhyme. I never could master it. I did notice that the rhyme scheme changed a little near the end...Intentional or not...It worked out well, I like it... A twist on the poem..Good job.

[wiccansamurai]

Yeah, the poem was forgotten ing my closet for a while, and then i couldnt regain the voice i had when originally writing it.

[Kieko]

Even so, it's really good. I like the way it rhyms and captures the reader. I especially like the last stanza using opposites like still and shake, very nice. And I'm sure that you can regain the voice you had ^_^!

[wiccansamurai]

EMPTY

I'm so confused
You left me
empty
I'm so tired
I want to sleep
forever
I'm so angry
I'm screaming
alone
I'm nothing but a shell of bone

[wiccansamurai]

HOLLOW HEART

I put myself together
using glue and tape
Thinking I was whole
When really out of shape
Thinking I could walk away
without falling apart
but I broke into pieces to find
A hollow heart

[wiccansamurai]

SAVE ME

Save me
I know that you can
All that you need to do
Is take a hold of my hand
I know I'm not her
I know I'm not anyone
Just see me
and what's been done
I can't go on like this
I know you can heal
Get me out of here
help me to feel