Writing Photographs (Poem--E)

[kalon]

We were writing triolets at the writers' meeting for our school literary magazine, The Stylus, and ths is what I came up with. Comments/critcism would be appreciated.

A triolet, by the way, is a type of poem where the first, fourth, and seventh lines are identical, and the second and eighth lines are identical. Also, lines three and five rhyme with the starting line, and line six rhymes with line two.

Photographs

A picture trapped within my mind
Fades until it?s white and black.
A gossamer memory left behind,
A picture trapped within my mind.
Of sun-broken storms and something kind,
A place to which I cannot go back.
A picture trapped within my mind
Fades until it?s white and black.

[Damburaki]

[COLOR=DarkSlateGray][SIZE=2][FONT=Arial Narrow]This is really great. I think that it's well-done and nicely executed. Once again, great writing.[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]