Guest XBebop Posted June 30, 2003 Posted June 30, 2003 I have to first chapter up here [url]http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1406322[/url] it's a Comedy/Romance just like the anime, and it's kinda random. Hope y'all ike it!
Spikey Posted June 30, 2003 Posted June 30, 2003 It's okay. To much talking though. You need some action...
Guest XBebop Posted July 1, 2003 Posted July 1, 2003 it's a love hina fic, there's not much action. lol. i'll add some in chapt 2 or 3 though.
BlackDragon465 Posted July 1, 2003 Posted July 1, 2003 I would say it needs a bit more discription of the settings and characters moods. Is good so far.:)
Guest XBebop Posted July 4, 2003 Posted July 4, 2003 c'mon people, there are 43 views and ur not posting! TELL ME WHAT U THINK OF IT! ch.2 isn't up becuase i got lazy the last few days. lol
Naru Posted July 21, 2003 Posted July 21, 2003 i like that. it sounds like something that would really happen in Love Hina.
Nate Posted July 25, 2003 Posted July 25, 2003 Funny...but it does need action. Of course an uppercutnito the sky is actrion..and the action i take the 'some' for is ok...but..*shrugs*
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