Writing Ryoko Matsushita

[Sweet Pie]

[FONT=Century Gothic][color=red][b][size=3]Chapter 1 & 2[/FONT][/color][/b][/size]

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Chapter 3 coming soon....
*p/s: comments and criticism are welcomed.

Best regards,
Sweet Pie (S.P.^_-)[/color][/size]

[Guest Midnight Rush]

Hmm... this one is interesting, although her attraction to her father seems a bit unnatural, but its entirely possible. The brother-sister interaction is quite accurate, and the thoughts/speech match the characters well. My biggest question is, what exactly is the plot? No offense, but these two chapters seem to be sort of like set-up chapters, rather than story chapters. Please correct me if I'm wrong,
Your friend,
Patrick