941_1432310904 Posted October 5, 2002 Posted October 5, 2002 tell me what u think, i know its not the greatest,But yeah.. I cried, Kissed my fingers. I breathed, blew the kiss. I hoped, hoped it would reach you. I called, no one answered. I was just thinking of you. I missed you. I needed you. I count the days Years. I count to five. ((Five bloody years)) I wanted to see you. I cry, but you're not here to [......]wipe the tears off my eyes. I crumble, swamped by Memories
Mitch Posted October 5, 2002 Posted October 5, 2002 [color=red] It's ok, but you're right, it isn't the best. I think the redundancy of 'i' kind of bogged it down some. And some of the words could've been better chosen. All in all, I'd give it a 7/10.[/color]
Corey Posted October 5, 2002 Posted October 5, 2002 8.5/10 I like repetition in poems. Did this one spawn from a personal experiance?
zidane11 Posted October 5, 2002 Posted October 5, 2002 That's ok. You must really like to love poems.
941_1432310904 Posted October 5, 2002 Author Posted October 5, 2002 Lol,yeah i gues i like love poems, but not all my poems are love poems..Lol just alot of them... And yeah i guess u could say it happend to me.
Tsung Li Posted October 7, 2002 Posted October 7, 2002 [color=darkblue]Do you write all your poems from personal experiance? I agree with DarkOrderKnight I like repetition in poems aswell, 8.7/10. [/color]
941_1432310904 Posted October 7, 2002 Author Posted October 7, 2002 yah i do, Well most of them are from experience & thankz
ke thampi Posted October 8, 2002 Posted October 8, 2002 why i again with lovely feeling, i missed with ,some of .. thampi [email]kethampi@hotmail.com[/email]
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