Writing Faithful fighting

[darkfreak0304]

Faithful Fighting

bullets flyacross terror stricken air
as chrilren of the same so called god
murder and maim their brothers
within a strife with no cause.

Blasphemy, to atrocity,
new scapegoats they formulate
man made fires burn without reason
killing those they should be holding
keeping warm throughout their life.

All in all their soulds darken,
not knowing for what they fight
crying out in their torement,
searching for the bloody truth.

Soldiers scream,
falling to the bloody ground,
"I am forsaken for killing,
in this war which lies create."

[vegeta rocker]

hmmmmmmm interesting no doubt.
It gives a point and lays it right out on the table face up.
If you want crit than lets see.....
Spelling is the only thing that really screams out at me.
I like it, at the risk of starting a debate,
More people have been killed in the name of God than anything else.

BTW Your sig question.....the dark blue night with the stars out.

[Spikey]

Very intreging. But, you just need some grammer, and puctiuation corrections, and it will be great. Nice job. I love the meaning that it gives.