Sanosuke159 Posted September 15, 2003 Share Posted September 15, 2003 This is one of my favorite poems I wrote. The Poem is [I]The Rose of my Heart[/I] The rose of my heart it's beatslike a virgin's beats so strongly willingly, lonely the beat of my Heart beat of my mind beat of my soul letting it go we are connected you and I, connected like the midnight sky we're flowing from everywhere, everything singing like the birds of midnight's spring 'Til it brings god's light, the sun, the moon, an arrow's dart, [I]The rose of my heart[/I] :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CB Shin Posted September 15, 2003 Share Posted September 15, 2003 I commend you on your poem. Nice vocab. Here's a short one i made as an assignment. everyone seemed to like it :) Rain: Death is the rain, Falling down gently or Sweeping mercifully, Chilling slowly, The rain may be soft or come thundering down, Unpredictable at times, Death is the rain, Ever so gently, Dropping down...silently. What'ya think? It's probably not as good as yours but I seem to like it. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sanosuke159 Posted September 15, 2003 Author Share Posted September 15, 2003 I think it's great! I feels like how I use to be almost all the time. Bored, doing what I want. Or something like that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stun gun Milly Posted September 16, 2003 Share Posted September 16, 2003 Wow,those are really neat poems,I like how they flow altogther as one,and the words you both used are really nice!!I like both of them very much,Sanosuke159,your poem sounds like a person's thought or what they're looking at and thinking at the same time.CB Shin,your poem sounds like a rainy type of day and thought,and a person's thought about how death and rain could be alike in similar way's.Overall I think those are really nice poems and the way they sound.I hope to see more!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sanosuke159 Posted September 16, 2003 Author Share Posted September 16, 2003 Thanks Stun Gun! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sanosuke159 Posted September 16, 2003 Author Share Posted September 16, 2003 This other poem and my first I've always loved is called The One. I hope you actually like it. [B]Be Honest![/B] He is faster than God's sight He is so sweet I just want to hold him tight. He is so light, like the stars above the moonlight. long hair burning; like the hate he has made when he is gentle, it all begins to fade away. like any other day. He is my prince charming, my angel, my king, my friend and my lover, He is.... .... the One. So, how do you think?:blush: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CB Shin Posted September 16, 2003 Share Posted September 16, 2003 Wow, you're a great poet, and I saw your poems in the other thread too :) Here's another one I JUST made up. An Inferno of Emotion, Always dwelling in my heart, My mind restless as I watch her move, Passion burning, Soul swelling, The longing of her grace and touch, Can you see...her? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sanosuke159 Posted September 16, 2003 Author Share Posted September 16, 2003 Wow! That was a deep poem. Keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sanosuke159 Posted September 17, 2003 Author Share Posted September 17, 2003 Okay. Now to another level. My other poem Untitled. For why must I live, And for why must I die? For these things cannot be seen by a blinded eye. Once when the world will turn, By my heart and soul will burn. When you and I will band, let us walk together hand and hand, unto this wasteland. So, how do you think?:angel: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CB Shin Posted September 17, 2003 Share Posted September 17, 2003 Even Better, I can't keep up :) Here's another one off the top of my head. Death and Depression, In the world, Are not the only things one can see, True happiness lies within one's mind, Keep digging for the truth, And when you find what you're looking for, Cherish it forever more, And never take things for granted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sanosuke159 Posted September 17, 2003 Author Share Posted September 17, 2003 It sounds like someone's talking to a person to change their ways of life. Or maybe something tragic happened to people or a city. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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