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Writing My worst poem ever


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After writing Existence, I suppose it was inevitable I would write a crappy poem. Here it is.

Time Passes

Time Passed
Once, as a small boy awoke.
He said to himself,
I?m tired of being along,
So he made friends,
And he was happy.

Time passed.

Once, after breakfast,
A young boy decided,
These people arent like me,
So he lost all his friends,
But he missed them terribly.

Time passed.

Once, in the middle of the morning,
A boy made a decision,
Why regret the past?
So he never regretted himself,
But he never liked it.

Time passed.

Once, at noon
A young teen said,
I don?t need anyone,
So he stopped to care,
Except when he cried himself to sleep.

Time passed

Once, in the afternoon,
A teenage boy said,
Theres no need to feel
So he never felt again,
Except for the hate.

Time passed.

Once, at night,
A young man said,
Do one must like me,
So he stopped trying to make friends.
But he didn?t like himself now.

Time passed.

Once, late in the night,
A lost soul said,
I have no need for life,
So he took his own,
And no one really cared.

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Well, I'll probably edit it a dozen times. I like the idea, but my writing could use work. I kinda forced this.
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[color=teal][font=times new roman][b]Hmm, it looked more like a short story to me.

But all around, good topics to discuss. Loneliness and confusion, pain and hope, these always make a good poem because they contridict one another and you get so many ideas to write. [/color][/font][/b]
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OK, I rewrote it. It's pretty good now.

Time Passed

Once, as a small boy awoke.
He said to himself,
I?m tired of being alone,
So he made friends,
And he learned what happy was.

Time passed.

Once, as he got out of bed,
A young boy decided,
These people arent like me,
So he lost all his friends,
But he missed them terribly.

Time passed.

Once, in the middle of the morning,
A boy made a decision,
Why regret the past?
So he never regretted himself,
But he never liked it.

Time passed.

Once, late that morning
A young teen said,
I don?t need anyone,
So he stopped caring,
Except when he cried himself to sleep.

Time passed.

Once, at noon,
A teenage boy said,
I have no need for tears,
So he never cried again,
And soon he forgot how.

Time passed

Once, in the afternoon,
A young man said,
Theres no need to feel
So he never felt again,
Except for the hate and anguish.

Time passed.

Once, at night,
A boy too old to be a child but too young to be adult,
Said no one must like me,
So he stopped trying to make friends.
But he didn?t like himself now.

Time passed.

Once, in the dead of the night,
A boy who had stopped counting years said,
The pain won?t go away,
So he drew three lines down each arm,
With a rusty razor.

Time passed.

Once, in the last hours of a fading day,
A lost soul said,
I have no need for life,
So he took his own,
And no one really cared.

And time passed anyway.
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  • 2 weeks later...
Wow that was really good for your worst poem ever i really liked it it really touched me i geuss that would make ur good poems super ausome

can u do me a favor i need a really short poem sumtin really deep and depressing but short if u can pm it to me plz Thank You
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