Guest Skyechild91 Posted November 25, 2003 Posted November 25, 2003 Soulful Truth I look inside myself to see who I really am I have a side as harsh as the winter, and one soft as a lamb I trust myself to no extent, while I am cautious and unsure I may be shy and quiet, yet at the same time I?m demure I cannot let myself be afraid, yet I cannot be strong I think that finally I know how to carry on When suddenly, my hopes are gone, and I am alone once more To ponder who I really am upon these barren shores I am not a child, yet a woman am I neither Slowly the confusion is beconning, come hither And while I try to figure out, my soul begins to wither I try, and try, and try some more When suddenly I see That Ill needed to know Was that my soul is free I am me. That is my soulful truth. * Not the best, but It made total sense when I wrote it.*
Kyo no Ryu Posted November 25, 2003 Posted November 25, 2003 :wow: Did you actually write that yourself? WOW! I had no clue you were a poet... you should start doing this more often! (Not to often though or youll end up like me. Blech):bawl:
Guest Skyechild91 Posted November 25, 2003 Posted November 25, 2003 ::beams:: Thnx! ::starts blushing:: Im not that good, tho.... Im better at stories and songs. Ill try to get another poem up! ^^ EDIT- Here it is! Song In The Silence A flute sings into the night A bird joins in as it takes flight A wolf bays, a cricket sings A bell gently begins to ring Then silence falls, and no one stirs A sure and true sound can be heard Yet at the same time, its presenence is unknown Darkness know sits on its throne A call is heard, yet no one hears The darkness melts, as does ones fears You hear it all, yet nothing falls Upon your ears, and nothing calls Sound returns as the presence retreats The wings once again beat The noises return, but not to their full brink They know not what to think; A flute sings into the night A bird joins in as it takes flight A wolf bays, a cricket sings A bell gently begins to ring * Hows this one? Not bad, not good, In my opinion.*
catdemon Posted November 28, 2003 Posted November 28, 2003 WOW that was great i wish i could write poems but i can't i'm only go at writeing stores tho.shigh
Guest Skyechild91 Posted November 28, 2003 Posted November 28, 2003 ::wiggles:: Thnx, Lia-chan. Much apprectiate(sp) it!!
Fyxe Posted November 28, 2003 Posted November 28, 2003 [size=1][color=darkblue]Woah! Those are very good indeed Storm. You obviously have a natural talent for poetry. All my poems are just sad attempts. Eh, well I guess I'm more a gaming girl. :p Anyway, I love them both. Keep up the good work! ^^ I can't wait to read more in the future.[/color][/size]
Guest Skyechild91 Posted November 28, 2003 Posted November 28, 2003 Thankees, Conna! ^^ I hope this does me justace! Chained My hands are tied I cant survive My world is crumbling around me I will try To stay alive As long as you will come to me I cant breath I can barley speak Your name as it comes to mind I try to sing I try to be But in futile attempt I sigh Im chained to eternity Wandering endlessly Hoping for someone to set me free Im cold and tired Only one fire Burns in my soul I long for you My heart beats true As I take control The chains are broken Its time for you, then To help me be The one and only me You turn away Again I sway Falling down into the sea Im chained to eternity Wandering endlessly Hoping for someone to set me free Comments? Scale of one to ten for all of them, please!^^
Squall Posted November 28, 2003 Posted November 28, 2003 Wow, very cool. I rate the first one 7/10, I didn't like it a whole bunch. The second one I rate 9/10, I really liked it. the third one 10/10, I liked it a whole lot more. I guess you get better the more you do it.
Guest Skyechild91 Posted November 29, 2003 Posted November 29, 2003 I did that good? Whoa...................................:eek:
Haze Posted December 17, 2003 Posted December 17, 2003 whoa. I love them! I think I like the second one best, tho. I like stuff that talks about the coming Darkness and all that dark mess. Very cool. ^^ 7/10 for the first simply because it didn't flow all that well. 11/10 for teh second cuz, I like it so. 9/10 for the third. It seems well. . . broken. Like you started it and then came back to it. It seems like the first 2 verses are slightly different in the feeling they give off. Could just be me in my sleep deprived state.
Guest Skyechild91 Posted December 17, 2003 Posted December 17, 2003 ^^ hnx, Haze! About the third- Its supposed to feel broken! Its titled 'Chained' after all! Im so glad yu like the second one! That took me forever to write! I had just read 'That Warlock In Spite of Himself' so thats where the Elizabethian english came from! CHeck ou the book! Its by Christopher Stasheff.
CB Shin Posted December 19, 2003 Posted December 19, 2003 You should try posting one of your poems in [url]www.poetry.com.[/url] You have a very good chance of winning $1,000 for your outstanding poetry. Heck, even I made it as a semi-finalist. :laughs:
Guest kris roby Posted December 19, 2003 Posted December 19, 2003 i agree with CB Shin. i made it to be a finalist. i wa spublished in a coffe table book and was perfeshonally read on a CD. I rate the fist a 8/10. the Second a 8.5/10 and the third a 10/10. and yes the longer you write the better you get. i have been writing poems since i was in 4 th grade< sorry for getting off-topic, if i did,>. your work is very good. maybe, probally, even better than mine. but, that's justmy oppinoins.
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