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[QUOTE]I kept on exceeding the 1500 word limit.[/QUOTE]
GOOD FOR YOU!!!!! No, seriously... that's awesome.

Right, anyway, I haven't read all of it at the moment, but you can bet I'll be comin' back for more... though depressing, it was very, very good. Well, in my opinion anyway. I liked the description of Danny... of how all the other people thought of him and so on.

That's a gift... writing so descriptively. Use it. Seemes you already have... whatever. Keep using it.
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[size=1][color=#800000]I'd be very interested in reading the original draft, if you still have it ?[/color][/size]

[size=1][color=#800000]Your explanation explains (heh) why it felt like there were parts missing in the description of the fly and Danny's reaction to it. That was the only negative comment I would've made about it.[/color][/size]

[size=1][color=#800000]The spacing of text, descriptions to reactions/surroundings, flow of the story - all of it is great. It was easy to follow and understand.[/color][/size]

[size=1][color=#800000]Good job ^_^[/color][/size]
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[COLOR=Gray][SIZE=2][FONT=Courier New]I was very pleased with how you [I]did not give the name of the dog[/I]. It would have ruined everything in the way tying up every little thing does.

A couple of sentences were worded rather oddly (sorry for not quoting them--maybe I just read them wrong), so maybe you should read through it a couple of times.

However, the piece is very good. I kind of wish my English teacher gave us interesting assignments.[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]
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