Writing move on [G]

[vegeta rocker]

Move On

Everyone tries to pull me down
My head spins when they scream so loud

Feels like I have nowhere left to go
Sometimes I just really
Want to know

Why I even try to fly when
everyone keeps waiting for
lightning to strike me down

here It comes now
I hear the scary sounds

seems like nothing can be done
pretty people have the most fun

where were you when I needed you
Hiding below with
Everyone you knew

Pull myself away
Run far so fast
All I want to do
Is make this feeling last

What it feels like to lose
control feels like I
Can do anything

Im part of nature now
Left you behind
Everyone moves on
Its just a matter of time

[Nomura]

9 out of ten...the poem seemed more like a song to me, so I could almost hum it completely! :animesmil

Just cut down some words, and it'll be perfect! ( I mean make the sentences shorter, so the poem is more hummible...)

[vegeta rocker]

Im glad you like it, i do need to shorten it up a bit.
Thanks for the criticism.