Ben Posted March 22, 2008 Share Posted March 22, 2008 Over the past few months I've written a few poems. Most of them are written for, or to, my girlfriend, or about love in general. They're really sappy, for the most part, so if you're into that sort of thing, enjoy. If not, feel free to mock me without measure. :p I'm only going to post a couple at a time, so as not to create too gigantic a post, but also so I can get feedback on each as I post them. And by all means, please leave feedback, positive or constructive. I'm always glad to receive help. :animeswea [B]Water[/B] Our love is like a river, Peaceful and deep Though it winds and it eddies, To a course it keeps. No matter the obstacle, No matter the foil, We make it through, Our love still unspoiled. Rivers change as they flow, They widen and shrink, Grow deeper, get shallow, Love's like that, I think. As time goes on, Like the river love flows. Though things may change, On and on it still goes. The river may grow smaller It may float up from the ground. But rest assured, with some time, It will rain back on down. (Yes, the first line is paraphrased from N'sync's [I]God Must Have Spent A Little More Time on You[/I]. So sue me. Or...um...don't. >_>") I'm not as pleased with this next one. It seems inconsistent. Like some of it is pure cheesiness and some of it is trying to be an actual poem. [B]Fire[/B] Love is like a fire, It can comfort, it can burn. Provide warmth for the heart, Or make you writhe and yearn. Love can make you warm, Right down to your toes, It fills you up with joy; It seems your lover glows. But fire also burns, As love can scar the heart. It's like something in your chest, An ever-flaming dart. To find the fire that's right, To find the love that's true, You need to find a person, Who's comfortable with you. If you're too hot for them, Or they're too cool for you, Things may not work out. Be sure to think it through! The fire of love is tricky, Sort of like the weather. But if you find the fire, You'll treasure it forever. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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