Writing Aypocolypse

[Bahamaut2020]

There was once long ago a world much like this one. It had life forms like humans living on it. The creatures were prosperous and had no equal in power. As the beings on that planet grew a dark vengense in space formed. Out of this evil grew hatred and suffering. Then the dark powers in space threw itself to the planet the creatures were living on. Soon anger and hatred filled the air and wars broke out. The creatures number in population decreased rapidly over the centures. While this was happening the evil that created the violance grew at the core of the planet. Then it formed a dark army of monsterous creatures. When the monsters attacked the beings of the planet had no way of fighting back. Some were wounded, countles people were killed and many were tortured to death. As the battle raged on the planet the core was haveing a major energy crisis. Before the wars the people of the planet used nuclear energy to keep the planet going. But since the war broke out none could do that. As the core eropted the fighting was worse. Finally when leased expected the planet overloaded itself. It blew up in a huge explosion that none could match. That planet was called EARTH. Continuing soon

[Raiha]

[COLOR=seagreen]So.........is that it? Go on...[/COLOR]

[Bahamaut2020]

Aypocolypse continued... There was only ten survivors, five were boys, five were girls. The boys were Pri. Nick, Sarg. Ralph, Lt. Nelson, Lt. Josh, and the last one was only known as Bahamaut. The girls were civilions so thier names are not important. They were out in space looking for something to destroy the dark monsters. On their course back to Earth they noticed the explosion. They knew the world was gone forever. Now they headed for a neighboring planet. Mars was the only one close enough. They set up camp not knowing what creatures to expect. Aypocolyspe continued soon

[Raiha]

[COLOR=seagreen]No offense. But your story is some what vauge. If I were you, I would make the posts longer, as they give your story a little more weight, or signifigance.[/cOLOR]

[Bahamaut2020]

Good suggestion but next time leave your opinions to yourself