Lady Asphyxia Posted March 25, 2003 Share Posted March 25, 2003 [color=darkred]A [i]very[/i] short little scene that has been floating through my mind. Probably trite, most likely badly done, but I needed to get it out of my mind and figured that you guys can, I don't know, something with it. Maybe criticise it. ~~~ [size=1]He looked at the pouring rain with misery, feeling the steady [i]drip, drip[/i] of water falling off the brim of his Akubra. His mates were standing next to him, as equally soaked as he. "This rain," he sighed, staring down at the ground - now a muddy mess only fit to be squelched in. "I swear, the only reason I shower anymore is so that the hot water'll put the feeling back in my feet..." There was a loud [i]kathunk![/i] and the high-pitched shrieking of a female, who was obviously distraught over something. A yell split the air. "Ryan Dunthrop, you get one more speck of mud in my house, and you can live with those damn pigs!" "Well," Ryan corrected. "That and the missus." [/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeathKnight Posted March 25, 2003 Share Posted March 25, 2003 [color=crimson]I like. Going to expand?[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted March 25, 2003 Share Posted March 25, 2003 [color=red] It's so short and...blurry. It just isn't going anywhere yet. Oo. But I do say it shows that this little idea might grow into something bigger. So here's what I say: Expand it more, grow it more, augment, augment, augment. It's too little in the state it is now to really truly be something. I don't really have an opinion, thus, until you expand it. But I'll be in the chimeras of my mind faceting a wait. :p[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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