Heartless Me Posted May 29, 2003 Posted May 29, 2003 This is one i wrote a while ago. please don't laugh... _____________ Dark Eyes Dark Eyes meet, Their hearts connect two bodies become as one souls entwined. Fire is a passion Burning deep within Immolation of impurity love comes concecrated Destiny foregoes itself One entity dividing again. Love now guides the way to another pair of Dark Eyes. Days turn to months A young woman prepares as a new story shall start soon a story of love, happiness and compassion A dark moonless night, bad omens Shots ring through the night one story has ended her tears flow like rivers A bright hospital room She screams his name but he is not there Another tinier cry answers her Tears of joy, he lives through her heart Dark Eyes Reborn.
KittyLynn Posted May 30, 2003 Posted May 30, 2003 [SIZE=1][COLOR=dodgerblue]"Love comes concecrated". Doesn't really seem to fit it...It is good. But it seems like the thought is only there. And not really the right words. Toodles. CL[/COLOR] [/SIZE]
Sara Posted June 5, 2003 Posted June 5, 2003 [size=1]That's a sad-sweet poem. A little "sappy," maybe, but it works well. Good job.[/size]
Guest dayday Posted June 18, 2003 Posted June 18, 2003 Why would somebody laugh? That's a great poem. I liked it.
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