Epsilon Posted June 15, 2003 Posted June 15, 2003 If you read this, can you tell me what you think. Or reply? ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Forgotten Insanity leads to chaos and sadness Then to our silence A crimson red tear falls to the sea Lost in an endless wave of darkness To send my prayer across all time, and space is true insanity To never be heard nor seen again To be forgotten is worse then death...
Guest dayday Posted June 15, 2003 Posted June 15, 2003 That is one of the best poems I've read. It was perfect so don't change anything about it. Maybe you could be it somewhere else more public.
Epsilon Posted June 15, 2003 Author Posted June 15, 2003 Thanks dayday your one of the only ones who ever reply. Thanks! I think I'll keep posting poems here. Here's the first Tonka Poem I've ever written. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sliver Moon Sliver Moon of night Up so high, then out of sight Come out son of night Rising sun now take flight Forever here, son of dawn
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Posted June 16, 2003 That one was good too. Keep posting them and I'll keep answering them.
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Author Posted June 16, 2003 Thanks dayday that's good to know. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Shadows The light fades away Shadows of the past soon apper Tears of death low nor high Comeing hence of night shade here Let us be in in darkness light Fear of mind in shadow's night ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Again thanks dayday.
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Posted June 16, 2003 I love it Ruby. Your point gets over a lot faster than mine.
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Author Posted June 16, 2003 Not really, by the way here's what I wrote just for you dayday. Plase don't mind that it's kinda sappy. Thank you dayday!!!:D ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Friendship You were the only one who cared The only one I knew The one I think of as my friend. Friendship is what you gave me I'll hold this gift forever This thing that you have given me, for it I'll always think of you
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Posted June 16, 2003 I like sappy stuff sort of. It's relaxing and easy to get into. Thank you so much.:D
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Author Posted June 16, 2003 Here's one of my poems I wrote for a class. It may be old, but I like it and hope you like it too. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Fade Away Fade...I fade away Never again heard nor seen Fade away into the shadows of the past To be forgotten forever Forced to be alive with fadeing dreams, and memories
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Posted June 16, 2003 I love your faden and forgotten poems. They really get to me. The stuff you write is basically perfect. I can't find a thing wrong with them.
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Author Posted June 16, 2003 I can most people I know say some of them are kinda sad and distrubing. At certin points that is...any ways here's the next one. I wrote it dureing math though, so it might sound really bad. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Star Shade's Night Shadows of Star Shade's Night The darken fears of our light Shadows come in thy might Out of mind, and out of sight Guilding stars destroy our light Forever here in, in Star Shade's fright
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Posted June 16, 2003 *claps* *claps more* *claps again* You are one of the best writers who's I read. That's probably because I don't read a lot, except when I really like it. So if I keep reading your poems I must really like them.:wow:
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Author Posted June 16, 2003 :blush:Thank you dayday. I like your poems too, they're great! Your a great writer too, I say this beacuse I mostly stick to reading one kind of thing. But yours is different then what I read, I'll keep reading yours as long as you post them.*claps for you* Thank you dayday.
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Posted June 16, 2003 You're welcome Ruby and I will keep posting mine as long as you keep posting yours.
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Author Posted June 16, 2003 Good, that's great to hear!!! But you might be postiong for along while then cause I usually write a poem or something each day.
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Posted June 16, 2003 Well, I don't write everyday but when I do it's more than one thing. I think I can keep up.
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Author Posted June 16, 2003 That's good, I wounldn't want you to fall behind on anything. I'll check and read when ever you post. This is the first thing that I had ever gotten published, they liked it for some really odd resones. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sadness... Sadness is black A shadow of darkness It flyes through the world Just as death dose It takes lives for it's own Sadness can never be stopped For it feeds off fear Which can never be stopped For forever on it lives in our hearts
Guest dayday Posted June 16, 2003 Posted June 16, 2003 This one will also live in my heart. Another poem another applause. Keep them coming.
Epsilon Posted June 16, 2003 Author Posted June 16, 2003 Thanks dayday, here's the next one. It's kind of wierd though. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ All the things I'm not strong, I break in the wind I'm not smart, for I'm just a broken shadow I'm not a queen nor king, a mare puppet and pawn For times I'm forced to live a nightmare, those times when I'm to live reality These are all the things I am, all the things I feel I'll be forever All the things I will always be
Guest dayday Posted June 17, 2003 Posted June 17, 2003 It isn't weird. I wrote one like that before too. Not exactly the same topic or thing, but still kinda the same.
Epsilon Posted June 17, 2003 Author Posted June 17, 2003 Thanks for under standing dayday...I have another poems to put up now. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This place... Here I am again Left alone in my insanity Locking my self away from reality Those words that I once said, they have faded away from the world Their gone echoing in the darkness The meaning of my feelings, they have gone away from here This place I had once loved This place, the place where I once felt This place is where my emotions, where they have all gone away
Guest dayday Posted June 17, 2003 Posted June 17, 2003 Wow, and this place is perfect for everyone to read that. I love it. Keep it up.:smirk:
Epsilon Posted June 17, 2003 Author Posted June 17, 2003 I have another poem to put up, but I a title for it thanks to dayday. thanks dayday! Anyways here it is. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ A Voices Hopes-[COLOR=red]title by dayday[/COLOR] A voice is crying out for freedom Yet it wishs not to be heard, It wishs never to be seen, It wishs to be alone in darkness Yet I hear this voice at night All the world has passed it by In the night I sing to this voice This voice I hear, I wish to know I am forever to serve this voice And it forever to serve me A voice of a child that died, died far too young I listen for this voies In hopes it will one day stop crying That one day I shall die, and meet the broken child
Guest dayday Posted June 17, 2003 Posted June 17, 2003 That was a great poem too. You should try 'A Voices Hopes' or something like that for the title.
Epsilon Posted June 17, 2003 Author Posted June 17, 2003 'A Vocies Hope' I like that. It'd make a good title for a book too, thanks dayday! Here's the one I wrote today, well earlyer today. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Fate... Why can't we challenge fate? Should fate be as so cruel as to kill us Just for thinking the way we do Acting on our feelings for the world Fate has no forgiveness, for those who wish apon a star Our lives have not been written in a book Yet we can not change our fate Fate and destainy go hand in hand Fate is destainy, and destainy is fate
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