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I lay to rest my wearied mind
My deepest thoughts I cannot quell
The peace of sleep I cannot find
There is no bottom to this well

Wisdom forces itself on me
They are the thoughts that I can't voice
From my greatest strength I must flee
Though giving in would cause rejoice

I stop myself through conscious will
This causes me the greatest pain
A part of me's what I must kill
I can sleep only when it's slain

On silence now my mind does feed
I can't obey its silent creed
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Erik, as always you impress me. Your writing skills are unparalelled on this board. I love your use of stanza. Very clever writing, and a story that could be intepreted in more ways than one. I empathize your message!

"From my greatest strength I must flee
Though giving in would cause rejoice"

This passage is extremely profound in my opinion. The irony you presents is simple and powerful. I can think of thousands of ways our minds can be as much of a burden as a blessing. I can also relate this to more than a mind, or wisdom.

400th post, what an honor to have spent it on this.

thanks for gracing the board!

Your friend,
Jordan
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