RainbowChick Posted February 13, 2004 Posted February 13, 2004 Hi everyone. I not much of a poet, hell, I'm not a poet at all but I got this inspiration and wrote this. What do you think? Flying Free There is a place I call my own Where I can stand by the sea And look beyond the things I've known And dream that I might be free Like the bird above the trees Gliding gently on the breeze I wish that all my life I'd be Without a care and flying free But life is not a distant sky With a cloud without rain And I can never hope That I can travel on without pain Time goes swiftly on it's way All too soon we've lost today I cannot wait for skies of blue Or dream so long that life is through So life is a song I must sing A gift of love I must share And when I see the joy it brings My spirits sore through the air Like that bird up in the sky Life has taught me how to fly For now I know what I can be And now my heart is flying free Well, what do think?
Ryu_Sakura Posted February 13, 2004 Posted February 13, 2004 So pretty! I love it. Only one problem repettive rhyming like, free, be then free. I know they are not next to each other going down but... It's just anoying and using free twice in one verse? Avoid it at all costs!
Guest SilverRiversong Posted November 8, 2004 Posted November 8, 2004 This is in response to your poem. Just curious but are you aware that the poem that you "got an inspiration and just wrote" is actually a poem and song writen by Don Besig? It has been for quite a while, published by Shawnee Publications in 1980. Long enough to be put into school vocal books, sung by many people, etc. It is [I]most[/I] interesting that you happened to have the same stroke of genius... [QUOTE=RainbowChick]Hi everyone. I not much of a poet, hell, I'm not a poet at all but I got this inspiration and wrote this. What do you think? Flying Free There is a place I call my own Where I can stand by the sea And look beyond the things I've known And dream that I might be free Like the bird above the trees Gliding gently on the breeze I wish that all my life I'd be Without a care and flying free But life is not a distant sky With a cloud without rain And I can never hope That I can travel on without pain Time goes swiftly on it's way All too soon we've lost today I cannot wait for skies of blue Or dream so long that life is through So life is a song I must sing A gift of love I must share And when I see the joy it brings My spirits sore through the air Like that bird up in the sky Life has taught me how to fly For now I know what I can be And now my heart is flying free Well, what do think?[/QUOTE]
Lady Asphyxia Posted November 8, 2004 Posted November 8, 2004 [font=Verdana][size=1]SilverRiversong, thank you for bringing this to my attention. Although I do ask that if this happens in future, just PM me. ^.~ Rainbow Chick, we do not under any circumstances, put up with plaigerism. Posting your story on the net requires a lot of trust on the part of the author, and you have broken it.[/size][/font] [font=Verdana][size=1][/size][/font] [font=Verdana][size=1]A less important issue [considering the perspective] is one that still needs to be hammered home this time; ratings. All threads need ratings. You should all know this by now. [/size][/font] [font=Verdana][size=1][/size][/font] [font=Verdana][size=1]Thread Closed.[/size][/font]
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