Dragon Warrior Posted March 27, 2004 Share Posted March 27, 2004 [center][SIZE=4]Lu[u]dv[/u]ik[/SIZE] [IMG]http://www.otakuboards.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=18270&stc=1[/IMG][/center] (This be the second time I wrote this damn thread) Pronounced Lood-vick, it's actually a child's play from the Holocaust where children in one of the concentration camps performed it for adults. I wish to redo it into a play, movie script, book, something! But first, here are the two plotlines: the play's story, and my version. [b]:::Play:[/b] Ludvik is a vile carpenter who hates the Birds of Cheb because of their song. He builds boxes and cages and stashes the birds away in them. The smallest bird of the village known as Peppysack (or something) stops Ludvik and saves the birds who eventually run Ludvik out of town. Pretty simple stuff. [b]:::My Version[/b] Mine isn't kiddy stuff. The birds have been replaced by humans whom live in the town of Cheb. Ludvik, still being a carpenter in my story, lives in a small house outside of Cheb. He's actually a good man in mine, but his only company are crows and other evil birds like Ravens (I threw the birds in because I wanted to still include birds somehow and they give off the more devious environment). Anyways, he's so lonely that he's driven mad and becomes drunk with hate. He despises the villagers of Cheb and secretly kidnaps them one by one and locks them in cages down in barracks underground that he built (still keeping partially some of the original idea). People are wondering where these villagers are disappearing to and it's becoming rather conspirious. The main character in the play was a small girl bird called Peppysack or whatever. In mine, it's a dude named Pip. I'm working on what role he plays so he gets involved with stopping Ludvik. Possible ideas for him are: [list] [*]He's a doctor and is finding clues (doesn't work well) [*]Priest [*]He's a detective of the middle ages [*]He's just too damn curious XD [/list] Another thing is, I've been working on settings and styles of this story. I want medieval gothic theme. Something Tim Burton's [u]Sleepy Hollow[/u] mixed with the new upcoming [u]Van Helsing[/u] film. My town I want all crooked and mishapen. Cheb should be as eerie as it is. This isn't a scary story or a tale of some lunatic like in [u]Willard[/u] (though Ludvik goes mad with hate and loneliness). I want it to be a tale of man solving mystery of strange disappearances and soon enough in the story, deaths. There will be use of swords as the main weapons, but crossbows are mentioned vaguely too. My ideas are small, but I want opinion. I haven't written it yet, but what do you people want? Movie script, book, or what? And please do give feedback on my ideas and plotline, especially Pip's role. Thanks in advance :D "It's suddenly cold in Cheb." -Quote from Pip even if the story hasn't been written. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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