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Writing Envy [E]


Ezekiel
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[SIZE=1][I]The emotion of Envy is like a rose
Where a rose blooms and grows
In the light and warmth that is
Other?s happiness, Envy is the same.

Where a rose has sharp thorns
Hidden by it?s happy and beautiful exterior
Envy is hidden just as well
Behind a similar mask.

As a rose dies and re-grows
With the changing seasons
Envy dies and returns with each
Ill-passed compliment and separation

Yes, Envy like a rose, is beautiful
But it is something that all must avoid
If they do not wish for themselves
To get hurt.[/I]

Random.[/SIZE]
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[COLOR=DarkOliveGreen][SIZE=1]Mmm.. I liked that. I especially like the flow of the words of the third verse. The last verse I didn't like too much.

[B]But it is something that all must avoid
If they do not wish for themselves
To get hurt.[/B]

I guess the words seemed casual compared to the rest that you used. But, other than that, it's beautiful. Envy is indeed like a rose, and you showed it well.[/SIZE][/COLOR]
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