cancer Posted January 15, 2006 Posted January 15, 2006 [COLOR=DarkRed]Mister can you help me out Take my hand and pull me now Up and away I'll go with you If you can please make me feel blue For now I am happy and joyous you see Standing with my love by the apple tree And though you can not see it My heart is violently having a fit My knees are weak and my lips wet And the girl beside me I only just met You'd think I was happy and content I'm sure But if that's what you think then pick another door Because the truth of the matter is that I am lost Oh yes I am - I'm lost in love.[/COLOR] ([I]This is just a quick poem I wrote off the top of my head. Please tell me what you think ^__^[/I] )
2010DigitalBoy Posted January 15, 2006 Posted January 15, 2006 I've always liked poems like this one, that tart wih a line like "Mister can you help me out" and go along like that. Not sure why. I guess it's cuz it kinda sounds like a song, or at least that's how I read it. Very good.
Lady Asphyxia Posted January 16, 2006 Posted January 16, 2006 [font=Arial][size=2]I think that you should read the OB Anthology Basics, as it details the Ratings System. Put simply, every thread in OB Anthology must be rated according to maturity -- and any thread that is not rated will be closed. Quite obviously, you haven't read that thread, so I'll be closing this thread and the ones that follow it. [/size][/font] [font=Arial][size=2][/size][/font] [font=Arial][size=2]However, you can feel free to recreate this thread with the appropriate rating. Since you seem to have quite a few threads, if many of them are similar -- poems, short stories, and so on -- then I would suggest creating an Anthology of your poems, rather than create a new thread each time and clutter up the forum. [/size][/font] [font=Arial][size=2][/size][/font] [font=Arial][size=2]Thread Closed.[/size][/font]
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