Writing My first poem. (hope you like)

[Darkness]

This is my first attempt at poetry, so be easy on me. please!
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MY SADNESS

Since I was young, I'd alway try to be myself - but now I know that people won't understand unless you act like something else. Everywhere you look people preach about individuality but those have it are on the outside, punished for their special personalities. If you're quiet - you're stuck up/ outgoing - then you're fake/ smart - then you're strange/ sometimes I wish someone else would take my place. Only two truly understand me, my friends they'll always be. And the rest are nice to have around me, but they can only see.... so much, who would guess that someone like me could feel so out of touch.
This is my sadness.
A story in my eyes that most will never know, maybe I'm too complex, maybe I should let it go. Give up who I really am and what I really feel to be part - part of the crowd; something far from real. I tried it once/ it didn't last, I have to be myself - same old me - deep old me. The best side of myself.

Ironic how people act, only a few are tried and true, That's why hard to find, an open heart - an open mind, the ones who judge you based just on you. Those like me - those who are - those who know they should - those that can - those who will - those who wished they could - those who won't - those who can't - those who never will - A world that will never change, lest you be too still/ My enterprise, my compromise, my open mind, combine to make the sadness that is me.

If happy's fake - this choice I'll make - sad I'll forever be.

[PrisonerOfHope]

It looks like a story. Good though :)

-POH

[vegeta rocker]

whoa. deep man, i think it is very good you should really write more i look forward to more of your work. Really.

[Jesus Chicken]

God I hate being able to relate to stuff like that....
damn thats damn good. Don't stop writing, you're good.

[Darkness]

Thanks! I actually went to a poetry reading at the library yesterday and read it to a sizeable audience. They received it well! I'm really happy about it. I'd never would've thought that I'd be a poet!

[jupitersun]

POET TO POET I LIKED IT. YOU SHOULD TRY DIFFERENT FORMAT THOUGH IT KINDA LOOKS LIKE A SHORT STORY. BUT IT WAS GOOD.

ANGEL'S CUZ.

that was good, i can relate to what you wrote. your a great writer
-angel-

[Darkness]

When I put this up Otakuboards was kinda in and out. So I'm trying to get it current again. Tell me whatcha think!

[zidane11]

That's pretty good for a first time, much better then I would ever do.

[Darkness]

I won't try to keep it alive any more after this. I just wanted to know what people think of it, but I haven't been getting many responses. Oh Well.