Eclectic Posted May 9, 2003 Share Posted May 9, 2003 I have a few poems and fanfics i'm writing or have written, but i don't know what to do with them. any ideas anyone? PS: I can't get any one to post chapter two of one of my fanfic because of language. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Patronus Posted May 9, 2003 Share Posted May 9, 2003 No one can really vote unless they read something of yours, so I suggest you post a little part of something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sara Posted May 10, 2003 Share Posted May 10, 2003 [size=1]Put a note in the subject heading, or at the top of your post, if there's a language problem. OB automatically censors some things, just don't bypass them. Sure, post something.[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eclectic Posted May 10, 2003 Author Share Posted May 10, 2003 Okay, here's my latest poem. And I decided to take out some things in my fanfics. ~~~~~ Nobody's Listening Screaming Shouting Yelling Crying Why won't you listen? Try as I might Loud as I am Nobody Hears Me Famous as I am Infamous as I am Nobody Hears Me Screaming screaming screaming screaming screaming ... LISTEN TO ME! ~~~~~ Not the best, but the one with the most emotion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vicky Posted May 10, 2003 Share Posted May 10, 2003 Thats good, I won't say if 'out wrong with it. It fine to me. I would like to hear more of your peoms... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinkoru Posted May 12, 2003 Share Posted May 12, 2003 *nods* i wanna hear more. I like that one, reminds me of me. ^-^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaola Su Posted May 15, 2003 Share Posted May 15, 2003 Wow, I actually like the simplicity; small lines but a huge point that comes across. I don't like to read so I am most intrigued to read poems like this one. I think everyone can relate so it would make it a more preferred poem also. I think that while some may say how can I say this, but I think you do write beautifully. I would love to see more of your poems, even if there is a language problem, if it is a problem though, edit it yourself so we can read every word like f*** instead of the actual word, if that is allowed of corse, which I would think it would be, but don't put something for the other's to edit if they have to black through a whole line. A whole line gone is a waste, it has to have all parts to be a true poem! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
klinanime1 Posted May 15, 2003 Share Posted May 15, 2003 Your found poem is moving, and others are able to relate. It's great. There's this site, [url]www.fanfiction.net,[/url] and her sister site, [url]www.fictionpress.net,[/url] where you can post stuff, recieve reviews, and critique others. Registration is free, unless you want all the other nifty options. fanfiction.net is for fanfictions, and fictionpress.net is for originals. Lots of people visit these sites to see what new stories/poems/songs/manga plots are in the making, and are willing to review stuff. Check it out, if you wish. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eclectic Posted May 16, 2003 Author Share Posted May 16, 2003 Thanks for everything! I'll definitely be taking all of your advice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eclectic Posted May 18, 2003 Author Share Posted May 18, 2003 Here four more poems of mine. The Key to Life is my most upbeat one yet. I wrote because I was thinking of one of my friends whose friend had committed suicide and wondered what would have happened if someone told him that he shouldn't. There's more to that story, but I'll leave it there. ~~~~~ The Key to Life If Communication is the key to life Then I will never die. If Love is the key to life Then I may never find it. If Friendship is the key to life Then I'm pretty well off. If Happiness is the key to life Then I have my Ups and Downs. If Education is the key to life Then I have a long road ahead. But If I'm the key to life Then maybe it's you instead. ~~~~~ Night's Velvet Maiden Flying Along Spiraling Ever Down When Shall I Ever Again Touch the Ground? Though The Sky Be Beautiful In The Day And At Night With Sun, Moon, Stars Twinkling Bright White Blazes At Flight. For Once I Wish For Soft Ground Under Foot And Blooming Spring Flowers To Grow Where I Once Stood. How Long Shall It Be Ere I Alight Again? Long Will It Be Ere I Alight Again. ~~~~~ A Promise I'll Forever Keep You know that I am sorry For that promise I never kept. That time when you fell And I never looked back. I should have turned around, Should have stayed no matter what, You know I am sory For that promise I never kept. If I find myself Faced with that again, I'll laugh in Danger's face And to you stay ever true. I'll try not to break that promise again, A promise I'll try to keep. If it ever happens That I do stumble and fall, Protect me, Protect me, That promise I swore to keep. I'll never run away When on your deathbed you lay. I'll stay forever true To the oath I made to you. Never shall I stray, This oath I make today, Just for you this is A Promise I'll Forever Keep. ~~~~~ Fallen Angel's Prophecy on Popularity Popularity Ain't it such a fickle thang? One day you can have the entire World in your palm... The next a rumor starts to spread... then another... and another... and another... Until nothing cold ever save your Precious Reputation. You stood on top of your Pedestal Surveying your World Picking and Choosing who would be next. Then you stumbled and fell... and fell... and fell... You've hit the floor. Face it. You belong to Me now. You belong to all the victims of your lies Who've fallen because you were so Selfish. It was always about you. Now... It's My Turn to Choose your Fate... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
T man Posted June 13, 2003 Share Posted June 13, 2003 I say post your poems beacuse I think their good and they seems like some thing people will want to read.:love: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eclectic Posted June 13, 2003 Author Share Posted June 13, 2003 Thanks much! I'm going to submit all of them in a poetry contest. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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