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Say hello to my first poem that ISN'T a haiku!

As I, the Archangel, sit here at my post,
assigned to me by the figures of lore,
I watch and I wonder, I sit and I ponder,
What is it all for?

The fighting, the blood,
the never-ending slaughter;
Can't they see they're drowning
in their own pietous water

Of hate and destruction?
It brings me to tears,
the endless decay
of man over years.

As I, the Archangel, sit here at my post,
assigned to me by the figures of lore,
He is now here;
They suffer no more.

Opinions?

Hitokiri Battosai
Posted
[size=1][font=century gothic][color=gray] You have a pretty decent grasp of rhythm. It appears to me that you have talent. I'd love to see you continue and pursue this more.[/size][/font][/color]
  • 4 weeks later...
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Thats some mighty good work, I often have trouble with my poems because I write them as I feel or on my opinions and the timing/rythem/flow of the poem is often thrown off, I wish i could get my poems to flow like that one, smooth as a clear cold stream, keep up the inspiring work.

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