Writing In Your Eyes

[Solo Tremaine]

I look around my room
At the things we did together.
"Forever," you'd said.
I never thought
That forever would end.

You're not here.
It's like you never were.
The things we did all scattered and torn
Colours fade to grey,
And I look...

Into your eyes, the photos that call me
I want to be that love that I see
In your eyes.
I want to be the one who holds you.
I want to be the one who's reflected
In your eyes.

I walk around
To the places we went together
I look, and I see
What we used to be.
Who I used to be before I lost you.

I'm not here.
I could have never been here.
My mind collapses into tiny shards
Of a dream I might have once had.
And I see...

In your eyes, staring at me
I want to be the love that I was
In your eyes.
I want to be held by you.
I want to be an immortal reflection
In your eyes.


Dedicated to Weh.

[Dmitri_Dragoon]

That was beautiful man, really touched the heart. In a way it sounds like trouble I've had. But it was very good. Very good indeed.

[Break]

[size=1][color=CC0000]Wow.. that's really good. I love the way you managed to capture all my emotions at the moment (apart from extreme hate and anger). Eee.. it almost made me cry. n_n[/size][/color]

[Pyrophobic]

Wow, that's so melancholy. I like the way it flows like one long untamed train of thought, and the twist to the present tense in the final stanza is clever. Well don. *wipes away tear*

[KittyLynn]

[SIZE=1][COLOR=dodgerblue]*sniffle* Sweet poem Soly. Very sweet. I loved it.

-Kitty[/COLOR] [/SIZE]

[Guest dayday]

I wasn't crying but my eyes were watering since I was so clos on the screen and I wear glasses. I loved it so try to get another one up soon.

[Rain]

[size=1]Soley, I didn't know you were into poetry. Well anyway, I like this. The last stanza is the best, in my opinion (and no, not because it means that poem is going to end :p). It's... um, I'm not good at commenting on poetry, but... the last stanza sums up the rest of the poem. If you get what I mean. Well, it was very good. Hope you post some more soon ^_^[/size]

[Lady Asphyxia]

[size=1]You know that feeling that you've just discovered a talent you never knew you had?

Well, at the moment, I feel like that.

Solo, that was great. It was soft, and sweet, not sharp and ragged. It conveyed the emotion in the best way, and it drew the reader in.

I love it, quite simply.[/size]