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  • Biography huge anime fan and big Stephen King reader

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  1. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Vampire poems   

    I love the first one! It's great how you included the good and bad of vampires (sex then your soul) I dislike the second one because it really doesn't flow. The stanzas are too short and choppy and need to be stuck together. Good work with the subject. I think you captured the vampiric essence very nicely. Good work.
  2. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Poems..by...me   

    Yeah they're alright. They just don't have alot of feeling and depth to them. But that's just me. Loads of grammatical and spelling errors. Still good though. Good job
  3. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Prophecy   

    Yeah it's ok but it just doesn't "click" you know what I mean? The lines are kinda choppy and thoughts are scattered throughout the stanzas. Still good but it's kinda "run of the mill" prophecy stuff. Ya know " the light wil destroy the dark" so on and so forth.
    Still good, I like the voice in it. Good job.
  4. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: The Lost One   

    Really good. One thing, you say something about a tainted one then for the rest of the poem you refer to it as a thing not a person. You might've meant to but I think it sounds awkward. Really good I want to see some more work from you in the future.
  5. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Something recent.   

    Wow! Really good! I write like this to. I think it's easier to write about dark things. You did beautifully with your words and descriptions. Very good. Just a few minor problems that are easily dealt with. Good job.
  6. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Different   

    I really like this poem and are more to come so keep coming back.


    I don?t want to go out there
    I know they?re waiting
    Waiting to see my ruin

    They have no problems
    Milling in their delusional pictures of happiness
    They don?t know what it?s like to be different

    Yet on the inside they are all tortured
    Tortured by the steel spike of organized society
    They drown in their own despair and sorrow as I do

    Alas, they keep a smiling face
    Putting on a show for those around them
    Never showing what they truly feel

    I do show what I feel
    Which is the cause of my public ridicule
    The truth is not what they want to see

    For these reasons I am banished
    Banished to a life of mockery
    A life where even the lowest look down upon me

    If I had a chance to start over
    I would without question
    This life has nothing for me

    The days pass slowly
    I watch the shadows dance on my wall
    Chased by the lights of the city

    My time is wasted
    All of it is slipping through my fingers
    Like trying to catch water

    Everything is empty
    Everything is pointless
    Nothing matters anymore

    Hatred burns within me
    For those who treat me like dirt
    I can?t stand them anymore

    I want everything to end
    I want nothing more from here
    I want it all to be over

    It will all be over soon
    Darkness envelops me
    All is done and gone

    They not need come for my body
    There will likely be nothing left
    But it doesn?t matter anymore
    I am different
  7. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Fear   

    I thought it was good exept for the part that said I'm a teenager. I think that took away from the piece. Otherwise good
  8. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Pinkness dedicated to Kitty   

    Whoa! Psycadelic man! Cool beans! Really good like the swirly things.
    PINK! YUCH! *splutters*
  9. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Cabin Fever   

    It looks kinda funny. And what the hell is with the rabbit? Nude Chicks? *runs to movie theatre* It looks kinda and what the hell is it about exactly?
  10. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Drifting   

    I think that the sport is just a chance to show off ones masculinity and how good they are with a wrench and a car. I think the thing they do it for is just to see if they can get away with it without getting busted.
    I guess it's an ok sport (if you could call it that) since it doesn't bother me and I don't participate.
  11. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Is this a good idea for a Zelda Fanfic?   

    Yeah I like it alot. And,damn! That guy in the corner is loaded! Keep writing!
  12. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Midnight Poems   

    Thanx I really like the second one too and the title is the way it is because I didn't really want to come up with an elaborate and deep title. I kinda like the simplicity. And I never really feel like the first one so no need to worry. More to come.

    Here's the next poem::)

    [SIZE=3]Fly Away[/SIZE]
    I used to have wings
    But they were clipped
    By my own close-mindedness
    I can no longer fly
    I have been grounded here
    Here in a world where imagination
    Is an utter joke
    I begin to regrow my wings
    But their growth is forever stunted
    By a world who no longer believes
    In the power of a child's imagination
    I long to fly
    As I have done in the past
    Still I am grounded
    I cannot rise
    Into the endless possibilities
    That are my youthful mind

    Whatcha think?
  13. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Dark Fantasy Sketch!!!   

    Nice1 I really like the pic of the girl. I write most of my poetry at somewhere around 3. Nice job.
    Really good.
  14. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Wolfwood Banner   

    Good job! Like the pic and the txt and...well everything. Nothing wrong here...*moves to next thread*
  15. Heavyblade added a post in a topic: Newest Painting   

    Very nice! I like the colors and the skin tones. I know you've heard about the arm enough so I won't say anything. >_ 9/10
    really nice.