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Um, thank you. Not exactly the criticism I had hoped for... then, I didn't really give out much to go on. :: shrugs :: I don't think I would have enough patience to do a colored copy...

It's definitely something to keep your head reeling. Visuals will help ^^, as I am still confused about the appearance to your characters. Your writing style is also a bit confusing, as you didn't clarify much, but I'm sure there would have been too much to include. Might as well go for it.

That sounds a bit too much like Risky Safety to me. (I think that's the name of the manga) It's not the most original plotline, and I don't see where it could go to deviate from the paths most other similar mangas have gone. Show some artwork, though. Sometimes all that's needed to sell a manga is some great artwork and awesome tone work.

Uh... I'm really confused and I think it has something to do with grammar and the rare occasion of me thinking to much. It sounds good, though, and the whole reincarnation-thing is very popular now. Heh, most mahou-shojo mangas are. It could go somewhere. Definately.

Hate to say it, but it sounds like a more violent Sailor Moon to me. But hey, it's all in how you present the manga. It could very well go somewhere depending on if it is attractive to the reader or not. Rely on your own creativity and not the situations in other mangas and it might work. It is in danger of being unoriginal, so watch out.

These plots aren't exactly the most original ideas out there, but if you tread carefully on the details I'm sure you could pull it off. Beware of making it too classic.

Yeah... my attention span is about as long as the lifespan of a fly, so there ya go. Five pages, without much action but it's the first few pages of intros and ect. About length: 200 pages is about the average for most manga series' individual books, so it's not really that long. Especially compared to the eventual length of my plot. ^^ I request you critique my work while keeping in mind I have shrunk the pages, words will fit in the speech balloons better in my original, and there is no tone as of yet. I'm a slacker, get over it. [img]http://www.otakuboards.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=18995[/img] [img]http://www.otakuboards.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=18996[/img] [img]http://www.otakuboards.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=18997[/img] [img]http://www.otakuboards.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=18998[/img] [img]http://www.otakuboards.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=18999[/img]

Reading over your ideas as they are now, they seem kinda... unoriginal. Or, they seem like animes that are just episodes of fight scenes without much plot. If the idea behind these stories are for just like a daily, humorous, web comic or something, I'd say it's fine. Then, you haven't told us very much about these ideas, so whatever.

A robotic, clone like being playing God to the human race? It's interesting, but I'm not sure how practical. Is there a specific reason there has to be a controling being? If so, it should know something about humanity and not be cut off from the human race, right? Or is this a utopian setting? An anarchy? How was God killed, and does he have a body, or was he killed some other way? I believe you should look more into this, and maybe it will trigger some more interesting plotlines.

The only thing I ever have a problem like that with is the Tokyopop manga comp. I have 6 short story plots wasted just because something else came up (or they're too long...) I just go with it. When I have one plot I work like heck on it because I know I get easily deterred so I can get the maximum amount of work in before I start another one. This way, when I go back to work on it I won't feel like it's a waste of time. If I go back and work on it. :: grimace:: I'm notorious for scrapping stuff permanently right before deadlines...

Sweet, an angel decked out with guns. This is definitely going to be worth reading. ^ -- ^. As for the name of the angel, I've always been partial to starting angels' names off with a vowel or a softer sounding consenant (sp?). Names beginning with A are usually good, but I can't see an angel about to save the world named Zebedee or Zebediah. I don't know... that would just irk me.

I really like where the plot is headed. I'm also curious to see if this will be slightly comedic, but there just doesn't seem to be room for it in this plotline. However, you've always struck me as being more creative, so... Is your manga going to start in the past, or in the present with hints towards the past?

Now THIS looks promising. No mahou-shojo fluffiness, just a serious, thought-provoking plot. My comp's resolution sucks, so I'm very sorry that I can't help you with the art critiques (meh, can't see...), but the story is very intriquing. It would be great to view in manga form.

This plot's been on my mind for quite awhile, and I had to get it out and have people at least see it let alone review it. Character sketches will come along later, when I get around to it. This is a four part original fiction. I only have an introduction to the first part and a bunch of character profiles. Decades after the present, a classic battle between good and evil is revealed that has raged millenia before the present. Three intelligent species existed; humans created from earth, ethereal elven beings from the rest of the cosmos, and demons from the chaotic clashes of energy allowed to occur, all by the immortal, reigning God. The fall of man only indicated the eventual destruction of the other species. In a climatic battle of deception and the near annihilation of the elven species (Part II), the instigator was sealed within his own mind, and the efforts to subdue him should he break through the barrier lie in the strengths of six extraordinary teens who are anything but ready to fight off the masses of demons sent to destroy them, let alone defend the human race. And above all, the guiding hand of a God who bends the events to His will dictates the outcome. Characters: Protagonists: Main Character: Tony Dartle dragon demon/human Elven name: Mayekli Gender: male Age: Part I 15-16, Part II ends @ 21, Part III 19, Part IV 37/38 Birthday: September 21, 2031 Height: 6' 6.3" (It seems he was slouching, however) Weight: 158lbs Hair Color: brown Eye color: Ice green Quiet, reserved, defensive. A Charles Dickens' effect happens to him in parts I and III; a sort of "small world out to get you" thing. He's a half demon half-human, and so is gifted with keen senses, almost indomitable strength, and agility. He notices a lot of things, but keeps them to himself if he feels it isn't important to notify other people. He struggles to open up and battles a death wish after attempting suicide at the age of 9. He harbors feelings for Beth that intensifies when memories of his past life return. He has an inane wish to protect Thomas, as he was essentially Thomas' bodyguard for 3 years and follows the last command of his former Captain. Tony lives vitually alone. Supporting protagonists: Beth Nightson Venesian, elven Elven name: Alerianne Fender: Female Age: Part I 15-16, Part II ends @ 20, Part III 19, Part IV 37/38 Birthday: January 15, 2032 Height:5' 9" Weight: 117 lbs Hair color: Dusty lavender Eye color: Dark green A flamboyant, tough girl who assumes too much for her own good. She is a healer by nature and talent and has a curiousity that will not be sedated except by answers. A Venesian elf, she is extremely pretty and extremely protective over her friends and family. Unfortunately for Tony, she isn't ready to nurture a relationship yet, and her memory return is excrutiatingly slow. She gets "weirded out" by his confessions of his feelings towards her. Thomas Astrilage Solarian, elven Elven name: Arlhtonel Gender: male Age: Part I 15-16, Part II ends @ 17, Part III 19, Part IV 37/38 Bithday: December 7, 2031 Height: 6'1" Weight: 146 lbs Hair color: Black Eye color: bright blue Popular, intelligent, and charismatic, Thomas is the typical hero. He always delivers the death blows to the adversaries Tony is unable to. The Crown Prince of the Solarian Reign, he is the undisputed leader. He bears the responsibility, masking the strain it puts on him with a happy go lucky attitude that can irritate is girlfriend. M (Melissa) George Lunarian, elven Elven name: Brea Gender: Female Age: Part I 15-16, Part II ends @ 39, Part III deceased, Part IV deceased Birthday: Novembr 27, 2031 Height: 6'3" Weight: 149 lbs Hair color: blond Eye color: blue-violet Out of all the elves, she is the one who differs most from her past. Before, she was a beacon of hope for the men she led, but is now hopeless. Buried in self-pity, she hides her addictions to tobacco and alcohol from her Aunt. Somehow, she's made an alliance with Nikki despite their vast differences. All hell breaks loose when anyone crosses her. Kyle Byars Lunarian, elven Elven name: Luthail Gender: male Age: Part I 15-16, Part II ends @ 27, Part III 19, Part IV 37/38 Birthday: March 19, 2032 Height: 6' .5" Weight: 152 lbs Hair color: Red Eye color: Usually warm grey Mischevious and brainy, Kyle seems to especially enjoy tormenting M, but may be hiding his feelings for her. His right eye sometimes bothers him, causing him to see odd things. Nikki Louisa Mae Elizabeth Lunarian, elven Elven name: Kahlel Gender: female Age: Part I 15-16, Part II ends @ 14, Part III 18/19, Part IV 37/38 Birthday: June 15, 2032 Height: 5'3" Weight: 124 lbs Hair color: white Eye color: amber Calm, organized, and down to earth, Nikki never found out about her elven roots until well into Part I. She was the Lunarian princess. Mark Nightson Human Dender: male Age: Part I 15-16, Part II n/a, Part III 19, Part IV 37/38 Birthday: January 15, 2032 Height: 5' 1" Weight: 120 lbs Hair color: dusty lavender Eye color: dark green Beth's fraternal twin, he is very different from her. Kind, polite, and tactful, he tries to keep his twin in check, and loves her very much. They are inseperable and he is capable of laying out any lecher who messes with Beth - if she doesn't beat him to it. Arliss Human Gender: male Age: Part I undeterminable, Part II ends @ 37, Part III undeterminable, Part IV deceased Hair color: Gunmetal gray Eye color: yellow Who knows his age, since Arliss himself has forgotten after roaming the world trapped in the body of a feline for many millenia. He is sealed in cat form in order to preserve him, though it is the disputedly most questionable action of the Lunarian Queen. Celine (Celhionne) humn Gender: female Age: Part I undeterminable, Part II ends @ 15, Part III n/a, Part IV n/a Hair color: dark brown Eye color: dark brown Arliss' younger sister, she is a lot like him and was sealed into the body of a fox Antagonists: Michael/ Mica human Gender: male Age: n/a Hair color: black eye color: black Kept alive by the spell of Mauvais at a bit of foresight, he burns for revenge under the lies devised to ensnare his services. He holds contempt for his species and wishes only to exact his revengs and then die. A pity that he is trying to kill the person he is trying to avenge. Mauvais/Lane dragon demon/ human Gender: male Age: n/a Hair color: blonde Eye color: blue The instigator of it all, his objections aren't clear. Perhaps he wishes to defy God in bringing about the end of the world in a different manner than originally planned. Manipulating masses of demons by driving them insane, he eagerly awaits the end of it all. Please tell me what you think and explain what you don't like. (Suggestions for a title are also welcome, but maybe I should get more of the plot out first...)

I'm really interested in where this story is headed. It sounds like it could get complicated, with so many strong characters. It's definitely heading [I]somewhere[/I] .

Don't worry about feeling disadvantaged, and don't be too tentative about jumping in if this is something new for you. I'd advise you to look into things like frames, borders, bleedlines,and paper sizes if you hope to get published. Just draw and write. It may help to get character profiles down or plotlines. Don't be too worried about forgetting stuff, too. Chances are, if it's a really good story you'll reply it over and over in your head.

Your picture is rather light. :: squints:: It's very stylized, and simple. I like it, though I can't tell what those things falling from the sky ?? are.

well, yeah despite the obvious ethnic difference eg names and places... It's not like all manwha artists draw the same, nor all manga artists so it's slightly unfair to over generalize by art style. I guess I was trying to say [I]manwha[/I] is the equivalent to [I]manga[/I], with... darn it. Whatever. I'm just really used to interchanging the two terms, so I feel that there is no main "difference" between manga and manwha other than one being Korean and the other being Japanese. It's kind of like the difference between a graphic novel (a good one, and not a comic) and a manga. Also, you have to look at the publishers. "Tokyo" -pop. The only non-japanese work they're going to publish will probably reach a certain standard. I don't know all the other publishers, but chances are, at least for the US, they mostly specialize in Japanese work. [SIZE=3]("regions' pronunciation?" What was I on? They're different countries.)[/SIZE]

You were probably going for the wavy look, but a ruler might have helped if you weren't. ^ ^ It's very original in style, as opposed to the more classic cartoons/ anime. Yeah, the hand is backwards. The shoulders are also kind of odd, as in a bit too low, but it's not that extremely noticeable.

I always thought manga and manwha were the same. On one of the how to draw manga books was the symbol, phonetically, [I]manwha[/I]. I think. In Chinese, my parents always calls mangas [I]manwha su[/I], so I dunno. Maybe it's just the different regions' pronounciation. That's just what I think, and I could very well be wrong.

Meh, here's my new pic that doesn't defeat the purpose of this category. ^ ^ Heh, I really didn't finalize this picture, the shading's off, and the poses are off, but whatever. [quote]No, it's not mandatory. If you decide to keep the one you posted and use it for the contest, you'll have 1.5 points deducted from your overall score.[/quote] Just teasing earlier. It's not like I really mind drawing a new one. : D

Whoa, new layout... I'm confused. ^ ^ It's a good thing I decided to get on recently, or else I'd have missed the deadline. Hope I didn't have to copy the pose exactly... I got bored during church. Anyways, two chikas from noire. Does it have an e on the end? hmm. The original is the color one. The fanart is only a pencil drawing. Edit:: Crap... You mean I have to draw another one? :P

You're going to do this too, right maladjusted?

neh, are you sure this contest won't die like most of the other ones? ^ . - Guess we'll have to keep it going. Might as well join, also. Not liking the impromptu... ^ ^

I got tired of watching Inuyasha chase a dead woman around, so I decided to draw this. The medium is completely colored pencil, including the black background. (I had five hours to kill on a train) [img]http://www.otakuboards.com/attachment.php?attachmentid=17400[/img]