Aberinkula

well then if you guys need something new to go on here's chapter 2. Chapter 2: Search for a sister. As DC flew with Tala and Hijar on his back, the kingdom started to fade in the distance. A cold chill rested in the sky, flowing wind fallowed. The three looked down at the ground, beautiful waving hills gripped their hearts. Farms, towns, and even estates passed as DC flew by each location. A few minutes passed and in the distance, Kingdom Crescent was in view. The outer are was filthy and disease probably filled the streets. DC came to a halt at the gate. the others jumped off, DC transformed back. Hijar took a scarf out of his coat and put it on. "Thank god for pocket space," Hijar said. Tala stared at him and sighed. She sat down and her doggy ears plopped on her shoulders. Brown doggy ears to be precise. They chained the look of innocent by going down her head and body, the belly of the suit was white with fake dog nipples. The suit was one piece, so it looked like a pair of pajamas. Her legs were also "dogged" and her feet looked like paws. "Sorry Tala but I have to laugh." Jested Hijar. He started to laugh. "Dork." "Wouldn't talk. I remember seeing your baby pictures. Mister wavy butt." Tala smiled as Hijar complained. "Just because I have a big baby butt doesn't mean you have to criticize. Besides I like my butt." Hijar rolled his eyes and tried to take Tala's comment and make it go out one ear. "Well let?s go.? DC said. He went up to the gate and waited for a guard to open up. 1 minute passed and no reply from a guard. Another minute, then another. Finally, it got old. "If these people won't open up I guess I will have to force entry." DC kicked down the gate. "Shall we go on?" He asked. "Holy crap! How did he do that?" Asked Hijar to himself. "Anyways let?s go I'll ask later. For now let the search begin." Hijar went in. "Coming in Tala?" Asked DC. Tala nodded. "Let me just get my dignity." She got up, sighed and entered. As they got in the stench already reached. The streets were covered with paper scraps, trash and even old clothes. The buildings were covered in ivy from the bottom to the top. Toilets were trashed on sidewalks. It was truly a horrific sight. "Not to talk trash here but this place is a piece of crap with more crap in it." JHijar joked. "Brother your jokes get old fast." Tala replied. DC looked at Hijar, then at Tala. "Well you two, let?s go. Bickering is for two year olds." Hijar ran off. "We meet here if we find anything!" Hijar yelled. The others just nodded. "Well I'll check over west, DC." Tala said as she walked off. "Then east I go." DC whispered. He soon disappeared. Hijar was soon at the town square. "Would you look at that, the cleanest place here. Well where to start searching." Hijar thought to himself. He headed towards a fountain. "Would you look at that? Brown-water. I am not surprised. I might as well look around.? HIjar started to search the area. Tala was walking along the kingdom walls. She stopped at an intersection. 3Paths I might as well choose one One person to find. "Damn I hate these kinds of things. Well might as well choose one fast. Eenie meenie minie mo catches a tiger by the toe. if he hollers, let him go. Eenie meenie minie mo. My mother told me to pick the best one and you are it. Middle path. That's the one I was going to go to originally." She squinted angrily and went on. DC was stuck between a cattle drive. "A cattle drive in the middle of a kingdom. There is a joke here. Somewhere." DC sighed and sat on a bench. "Do you mind?" Said a voice. "Ahh!" Yelled DC. "I'll pay you!" Said a man lying down. DC got up and stepped back. "Weird town." he complained. "Well might as well deal with it." Said DC. He sat on the ground and waited and waited.

[QUOTE=JJ]*shakes head* You just totally contradicted yourself, tenfold. I needed a good laugh today, thanks. Besides, it should be YOUR job to go through, look at what I corrected and decide whether or not it fits. Its your story after all. Besides, if I did all the work for you, then you'd never learn. ^_^ PS: Do you even know what syntax means?[/QUOTE] Your welcome for the laugh. I guess. Anyways, I will put your post to good use in the future. That and thing should always be put to use. Syntax has to do with construction with grammer. Thank god I remembered my dictionary.

[QUOTE=JJ]Well, forgive me for trying to help better your writing SK. I really thought that by showing you not only where your mistake was, but why it was a mistake, you'd learn more than if I just pointed out that this and this was wrong. I apologize and take my leave from the thread.[/QUOTE] Well syntax this. At least put the changes into a collected group at the end so I could get the complete feel for it. I'm happy you did it but I can't understand it hardl. And I'm smart.

[QUOTE=JJ][Color=DarkBlue][Size=1]Well, since all you did was check for spelling errors which you still missed, I'll do a basic copy edit to this for you because there's alot you need improve on and hopefully one or two things'll click for you. A word of caution, as I've been told by my editor, when using an 'and', you don't need to use a coma. For example, There's alot of places and I'll try to point them all out as I go along. (1) Either try to find another way to word the sentance, or use a gerund. eg. DC trailing behind or With DC trailing behind them, Hijar and Tala walked into the throne room. (2) With the coma here. Remember this. (3) Jumping from the room to the throne, especially after giving such small description of the latter is kind of sudden. Try to flush out your description here a bit more, without overwhelming the reader. (4) Spelling error, try 'the' ;) (5) Syntax here my friend. The golden throne was decortated from top to bottom with red gems. (6) Again, syntax. A maroon colored carpet stretched from the door to the entrances to the king and queen's bedroom, making a show of the thrones along the way. (1) ', and' Watch yourself. (2) Syntax. 'Hijar sat and the others followed suit.' sounds much better. (3) Where? Where did they sit? Details are your friends. (1) 'summoned' would be more appropriate, keep in mind, they're royalty. (2) forgot the other quotation mark. ;) (3) Don't capatalize after questions, unless it's a proper noun. (4) How do you turn around and stand? Try, 'The queen regently stood to greet her children and their friend.' Another point here to consider is, no one ever sat in the presence of royalty, unless they were higher up than them. (5) Spelling error. 'beautiful' (6) Syntax 'had brown hair (7) This last part is just trashy dude. You don't refere to a woman's breasts as a great chest. That's just rude. It's also quite insulting. Just don't make any mention of it, unless your writing porn. Then, find tasteful ways to refere to them. (8) These last two sentances could be brought together. 'Wearing a gem-covered skirt, her matching red lipstick and eyeliner just brought out the beauty in the gems.' (9) Once again, you really have trouble describing things. Textbook, she was wearing this, had this and this on and so on isn't interesting. There's alot of strategies you can use to make describing more fun for you and your reader. More after the corrections. (1) 'summoned' (2) No capitialization (3) Capitalization (1) Syntax, syntax my friend. 'We have known the entire time' (1) Coma, its an interjection, just not a strong one. (2) 'saw her', watch your verb tenses. (3) What does this have to do with her talking? Make that a seperate paragraph. (1) Is the hooker kingdom its nickname or real name? (2) spelling 'answer' (3) Again, no actions right after a quote, add in a 'questioned' or 'asked' then a coma then the action, being sure to use a gerund. (1) 'Hijar said' Syntax (2) Capitalization (3) Isn't it already annoying? Verb tense (4) In general, these kinds of talks don't require action, it's obvious what's being done/said/asked. (5) Try not to start a sentance with but (6) Same with and (7) Syntax again. 'First, Tala must dress herself up as a puppy and you should use this fake ID.' (8) If she's got a fake ID and that's the name on it, she has to be called that, substitute 'should'. (9) It's a proper noun, capitalize it. 'The Prostitue' (10) Use apostrophe's when using quotes within a quote. (1), (2), (4) Syntax, either work this the same way as I talked about earlier at the end of the sentance as a gerund, or put the dialog under the action. (3) Syntax 'Hjar asked' (5), (6), (7) chest, brought, started (8) Once again, these could all be brought together into one sentance. 'Hijar began to laugh, DC silently joining him with tears forming in the corner of his eyes.' (9) Gratuitous cussing, it's OK to a certain extent, but don't go overboard. (1) New paragraph. Put more detail into his change. (2) 'spikes' (3) New paragraph (4) New paragraph, how do you burst out of the kingdom? Is it really that small? (5) Syntax. 'Act like a normal dog and don't do anything to bring unneeded attention upon yourself or us.' (6), (7) Grammer/Capitalization, double negatives = baaaaad 'Don't poop either.' (8) Spelling/Syntax 'looked' New paragraph (9) Once again, combine your sentances. 'Tala looked at him frowningly, quickly turning away.' (10) What does this have to with Tala? New paragraph (11) New paragraph, more detail, all together. 'They continued, flying off into the sunset.' It may seem like alot, but alot of it can fixed very easily. You're on your way, keep working at it. PS: If you don't have a Word Processor and plan on actually continuing writing, I'd suggest downloading one. They're a huge help and they'll catch more than half of the mistakes I pointed out to you. PPS: Tical, you're not helping at all the way you point things out. Either point 'em out right, or don't so it at all.[/size][/color][/QUOTE] Tical helped better. I could actually understand him. Too many words. plus you used small print. My computer can't read that clearly.

[SIZE=5][COLOR=Red]The Story[/COLOR][/SIZE] [COLOR=White][FONT=Georgia]As earth faded away the last years grew dominat and blood was the only goal for most. A world where nothing exists and everything appears existant is confusing. Knowing what it trully is scares them. A creature exists to feed them. An angel exists to kill them. What is 'Them" you ask. Nobody trully knows but it will become clear. just imagine a world without love or hate. Happy or sad. Malice and despair. They do and they have to live with it. These creatures are called humans. They will soon come to deal with the fact that, their world is falling apart. The story begins with an event that changed earth. The apocalypse. In the year 2666 an atomic missle was sent to destroy a meteor. It hit the moon instead.A piece of the moon hit the meteor. But the moon soon fell onto earth. Pieces destroyed cities and left the planet devastated. More destruction was caused from chunks of the meteor. people died. But not many. a place in the eastern continents grew inhabited, by "them". But these people are normal humans exept one thing. No emotions. Well hate and happy, love and sadness are still left. All the others are out. This area consists of 4 continents. Africa, Asia, Europe, and Australia. Each one with 5 tribes. Somehow able to rebuild, the people prospered. But their memories were drained. Now the planet is stuck in an era different than any other. The Cerberus era. the reason for the name is only known by the 4 grand tribes. these tribes made the cerburus era come true. But a few years later the grand tribe of Australia was taken out of the picture. Giving true name to the cerburus era.[/FONT] [/color] [COLOR=Red][SIZE=5]The point of act[/SIZE].[/COLOR] [COLOR=White][FONT=Georgia]In a desperate attemt to regain membership, Australia started to attack. The tribes faught back and still are[/FONT].[/COLOR] [SIZE=5][COLOR=red]The alterations[/COLOR][/SIZE] [COLOR=white]The people are able to control the power of strong demons. the demons are known as the "alterations". When someone uses an alteration they can become one with the creature. Fusing their appearence and abilities. But despite that the demons can only stay a loft in this world for 30 minutes.[/COLOR] [SIZE=5][COLOR=Red]The tribes of Europe[/COLOR][/SIZE] [COLOR=White]Europe's name forgot this area is know as the "Soficticate Sanctum". The 10 tribes here are the most polite. And the most fast. The tribes are- -Tower tribe - they live near the eifle tower. They control the dead. -Black tribe- The darkest tribe. they control the fire -Sport tribe - the most active tribe. they control all games -The seven tribe - a tribe for families of 7. They fight as a group -Gamble tribe - the most risky tribe - they control the worlds casinos[/COLOR] [COLOR=Red][SIZE=5]The tribes of africa[/SIZE][/COLOR] [COLOR=White]Africa's name forgot this area of tribes s called "The animal kingdom". More monsters are found here than anything else. These tribes are the most sneaky. The tribes are -Hunter's tribe - a tribe of great hunter's .They control the weapons unit. -Camo tribe - The most sneaky of all the tribes. They control the army. -The tame tribe - The tribe with most animals. They tame the wild -Beast men tribe - A tribe of animalistic men. They control all mutation control. -The hidden grass tribe - This tribe is shrouded in mystery.[/COLOR] [SIZE=5][COLOR=Red]The tribes of Asia[/COLOR][/SIZE] [COLOR=White]Asia's name forgot this area is called "Death road" . Due to it's power and sheer horrable strength. These tribes are the most terrable. -Peacfull death tribe - A tribe of peace where death is sacred. They uphold treeties. -Blood tribe - The most violant tribe. They control the hospitals. -Demon tribe - The most powerful tribe. They control shamans. -Control tribe - The most smart tribe. They control all elements. -Tech tribe - The tribe with all technical knowhow. They control the entertainment industry.[/COLOR] [SIZE=5][COLOR=Red]The Demons of fire.[/COLOR] [/SIZE] [COLOR=White] - Ifrit (taken by me) Fast and strong. Shoots flames from mouth. Energy gets drained from user faster. -Diablo Cruel and hatefull. Fists are engulfed in fire for punches. Doesn't use to much fire. -Phoenix (taken) Huge and agile. Reborn from ashes. Uses wings for weapons that are engulfed in fire. akes energy from user when reborn.[/COLOR] [COLOR=Red][SIZE=5]The demons of water and ice[/SIZE][/COLOR] [COLOR=White]-Shiva Beutiful and elegant. Icy powers. Uses life force. -Uriay Large and powerful dragon. Water fighter. To big for battlefield. Consumes more energy. -Titanus Mean and cold. uses chilling water and ice. Doen't use that much energy. But is very weak against other enimies.[/COLOR] [COLOR=Red][SIZE=5]The demons of earth[/SIZE][/COLOR] [COLOR=White]-Cratos (taken) Giant and almighty. Crushes earth. User becomes unconsience. -Jilanas Peacful and willing. Throws stones. Takes very odd amounts of energy every ten minutes. -Rokoha Small and stubborn. Uses a crust that suffocate and damages opponents. Takes little power.[/COLOR] [COLOR=Red][SIZE=5]The demons of lightning[/SIZE][/COLOR] [COLOR=White]-Hamon Dead and strange. Shoots lightning from eyes. Consumes all of the users energy -Webra Crawling spider. Makes webs of lightning. Turns on user. -Gyros Mechanicle and noisy. transmits lightning from robotic body. Consumes much life.[/COLOR] [SIZE=5][COLOR=Red]Sign-ups[/COLOR][/SIZE] [COLOR=White]Name: Any name is fine. Age: what age your character is Gender: male or female Weapon: What weapon does he/she hold. Continent of birth: Which of the 3 was he/she born. Tribe: 1 of the 5 tribes. must be within continent of birth. Alteration (Demon): which demon does he/she control. Physicle form: what he/she looks like. Picture or discription. Demon form: demon appearence when fused with alteration. Image or dicription History: What events led to today? What emotion was lost completely? Abilities: 6 abilities or skills.[/COLOR] Any questions? PM me. I will answer then.

So far only Video Game Goddess is in. So I am going to stop this RP. Temporarily. The OB is not yet ready for this rp (More great ones such as Project gamers 2, Citius Altius Fortius, etc. have been released. So This rp will be brought in the future when a couple of rp's have passed. So I'm no longer exepting sign-ups. But I am making another rp to keep the others ocupied. Sorry for the stop. -Split

Wzait for oppisite day. If you lose you win. Just a pure thought. **** I LOST!!

name: Hoenheim gender:male age:25 demon form: magini rank: second in command, tactical division weapon: urd alliance: As part of the vanguards he wants nothing more than to help. He will never betray them unless something were to happen. personality: He first felt sad about a month ago. His beloved died. She was killed by a man from an unknown area. He can control sadness but it's anger and happiness he can't control. He can become so angry that he goes on a rampage. Anything he can find he beats up. Happiness is another thing all together. He will become so happy to the point where he will laugh until he pukes. Literally. when he gets exited the two kind of merge. he goes on a rampage then laughs at what he did. Because of his rank he brags a lot. To the point of others anger. He can be very generous. But sometimes he can be selfish. A cold side can sometimes come out. An evil presence glows around him. He holds many secrets to himself. He tries his best for the tribe. He fallows his commander's orders without question. His true ambitions are towards his tribe. He will do anything to protect and help them. Sometimes he forgets what emotions are. Due to the fact that a year ago emotions didn't exist. Combat tactics: He uses very well put strategize against foes. He reads their movement and goes from there. He uses ruthless hard attacks to make foes fall faster. he can use anger to an advantage too. But he rarely goes all out without thought. He tries to draw enemies close then gets them. He will use all kinds of tactics. So you can never predict his next move. he relies on speed rather than agility. Skills: He doesn't usually care about his advantages. He can jump high an run far. His stamina is really high. Like his commander he plays and instrument. he plays guitar to amuse comrades and blow away time. Phobias and weaknesses: He is afraid of heights. Near a cliff he tries to stay back. Once he had a heart attack when he nearly fell. He's also afraid of change. When something is different about a person he stays away. His weakness is seeing death. he was there when his beloved died. If a comrade is killed he goes into shock and does nothing about it. pet peeves: he hates it when people don't listen to him. Also he hates people that pick their noses and have terrible manners. When he sees it he glares. Giving the person a sign to stop. Also he hates people who put there hands down their pants in front of people. He will hit the persons hand and kick them. Despite his peeves he picks his nose. Much to his dismay.

As because of madwith5's post I will put down my charecter. Name: Raviel Artharious or Rav Age: 18 Bloodtype: O- Battle type: Drive form Magic type: Black magic. Weapon: Phantom srticker. This keyblade can split into two for drive form use. Or even three. It is about 6 feet long with exeptions to the handle and keychain. The handle is black with navy colored stripes swirling around it. The keychain has a small ghost on it. The blade itself is gray with spickes on the sides. The blades tip is red to symbolize blood or to show death. An energy source is located within the blade. The handle has microscopic holes that take energy from the user and taransforms it into power for the keyblade. When put dow the enrgy turns into a vapor and goes back into the user. The keyblade has a second form. which is the same keyblade exept white. Eyes can also be seen where the handle and blade meet. Abilities: Soft hit - this is an attack that hits an enemy with a soft touch. No use exept it paralyzes an enemy. Fire wheel - Shoots wheels of fire from the legs when kicking. They surround the enemy then burns them. Later on as skills grow the wheels get faster and larger. Plausable pause - This spell could use any magic. It's random. but a possible pause will happen that makes the user incapable of moving. Future moves Air raid - This attack will consume a lot of MP. But it has a great attack. the Keyblade is thrown into the air. It stops at a certain height each time. As it falls it heads towards the enemy then uses it's speed to cut the opponent with air thus damaging the body. Ars arx arxars - This attack sends a flurry of elements towards enemies. Plus the user can chain an unlimited amount of combos. It also inflicts a status effect. At the right time an attack can be unleashed during this attack. The keyblade will act on it's own attacking multiple enemies at once. nature crust - A coat of earth attaches itself to the user. Fists can be used to attack. Plus defense is tripled. Not all of it is there but I will edit that later.

chapter 1: The begining. Hijar and Tala walked into the throne room, DC trailed behind. The room was painted silver, and filled with old suits of armor. The throne was gold with red gems on te top, and red gems on the bottom. A maroon colored carpet went to the throne and led to the king and queen's bedroom. Hijar sat, and the others did the same. "Mother you called us? Asked Hijar. The queen turned around and stood. She was beautifu;, red-haid, and a great chest. She wore a skirt that was covered in gems. She wore red lipstick and eyeliner. "Son I have called you here to tell you something. You know of your sister's banishment?" She asked. She stared at tala like she knew. "We have always known since it happened." Tala answered. "Well. I knew that. Anyway I want you 3 to search for her. The knights have last seen her at Cresent Kingdom." She sat back down. "Okay mom, but isn't that the hooker kingdom?" Hijar waited for an amswer. "Yes. But I have reason to believe that she has become a-" "Prostitute." Said Hijar "Yes. that will become really-" "Annoying?" Hijar asked. "Yes. Stop finishing my-" "Food." Replied Hijar. "Anyways. DC will turn into that dragon thing and bring you guys there. But Tala must first dress as a puppy. And take this false ID. She will be called "the prostitute. Then take it from there." Tala stared at her mother. "Hell no." She replied. "Then Hijar." She said. Hijar shook his head. "No. DC who should be the prostitute?" Asked Hijar. DC stood up and scratched his head. "Tala." he blurted. "Then it's settled. The suit is in this ches." The queen brouht out a chest. Hijar started to laugh. DC was laughing. But hiding it. He startted to tear. "Shut the fuck up." Tala yelled out. "Well lets go" DC said. He transformed into a black dragon. Red spickes and blue wings started to form. "Hop on guys." He said. The dragon form of DC burst out of the kingdom and flew east. "So then act like a dog and show nothing that would make us noticed. don't poop neither." Hijar jested. Tala llooked at him. She frowned then turned. The wind blew Hijar's scarf off. They continued. Off into the sunset they flew.

[QUOTE=Gavin][SIZE=1][B]Great Reasons To Be A Guy...[/B] //snip// One wallet and one pair of shoes, one color, all seasons.[/SIZE][/QUOTE] I agree Gavin. Plus some organs are outside of you. Which isn't all that funny. [indent][font=trebuchet ms][color=darkgreen]SK, there's no need to quote Gavin's ENTIRE post - it's right above yours! Just quote the relevant bit - or, sometimes, it's okay not to quote at all, if it's obvious to what you're replying. --Raiyuu[/color][/font][/indent]

Okay all I have recreated the story Demon of the south. With a little help from Tical blue. [CENTER]-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-[/CENTER] Profiles Once there was a kingdom. Kingdom Maroon. It appeared to be peaceful. Two princesses were born, one with red hair, one with brown. They were named Princess Tala and Princess Uriay respectfully, and were the kingdom's only children until 1 year later. Named for the king's favorite fairy tale character was the red-haired Prince Hijar. At the age of 5 the children brimmed with happyness and encouraging parents. But when they became 6 their father went missing. the family devastated. After that incident Princess Uriay started to get an attitude. At the age of 10 She was the most beautifyul of the childeren. Her eyes were blue. And her hair was long. She always wore a black shirt with a red skirt. but when she was eleven she tried to kill Prince Hijar. She was banished at the age of 15 when she was seen killing a peasent laying on the courtyard bench. Now the Children well the last 2 children, are living peacful. [align=center]Prince Hijar.[/align] He was tall. He stood at 5 foot 7. Being a modern aged teenager he was mildly interested in women. His red hair spicked. He wore a headband. Even to the shower. His eyes were red as well. but a calming red. He wore a shirt. Sleevless shirt that was gray with a blu-flame at the bottom. His pants were blue with straps. He wore sneakers. The sneakers were white and blue. Laceless. His personality proved him a great prince. He had the balance of manners and fiery ruling. He was always cool tempered. Happy. But inside him he hated someone very much. His sister Uriay. He was glad to see her go. He had hoped that someone killed her. He was always depressed. Not mentaly but physicly. He was stronger than his father. But never stood tall enough to show the world who he is. He makes friends pretty quick. But inside all that lies a jerk. [align=center]Princess Tala.[/align] She wasn't as tall as Hijar. Stood 5 foot 6 inches. Her teenage body is well developed. Her breasts were big. But not to big. Her hair was red. But she died it brown. Her hair has a pony-tail. Her eyes were blue. People always stared into her eyes. Her Shirt was blue. And her bra was blue as well. She wars a skort. A skort is a skirt with shorts. She wore panty hose. And her legs were as valumptuis as her body. She wore red gloves. Her sjoes were red with white stripes. Her personality was completely different. She had terable manners. She wasn't rude just sloppy. She was gullable. Stubbern as well. When she walked the kingdom teenage men would ask her out. But she declined every time. She wasn't selfish. Due to the fact that she bought everything she wanted. She wasn't calm. She was hyper. joking was her talent. She also hates her sister for killing that peseant. She is strong hearted. But not strong. She was truly an encouragment to other teenage women around the kingdom. [align=center]Scourge of the clouds.[/align] This kids a big deal. He wears a cape to hide his face. But his hair is blue and his eyes white. He was born in another kingdom but was adopted by queen maroon. He is 16. But he is truly 100. He is called scourge of the clouds by his kingdom. And kingdom maroon. But nobody {except the queen} knows why he is called what he is. He's called DC. his shirt is blue with buttons going down. He wears a belt with a buckle that says, "DC" Custom made by the local tailor. He wears black pants with pockets going all the way down. his shoes are blue to with small wings. Nobody knows his personality. but he is kind to his friends Tala and Hijar. And to animals. He's always found with Tala and Hijar. Even at school. But who is he? Why is here called what he is? But he is able to turn into a dragon. Tala and Hijar know that. But don't tell people. He is 5 foot 8. he even has his own room in the castle. But despite his true age he has adapted to the modern world. He watches TV, plays video games, all that stuff. He has posters in his room. But for whatever reason he always keeps people away from his closet. He has a secret stash of magazinses. But Hijar knows. That shows the mag's are for guy's entertainment. but anyways he will develop as the story goes on. Hijar, Tala and DC were sitting on the castle roof looking at the kingdom. Eating ice cream ant talking. "Hey Tala?" Asked Hijar. "What." She replied. "Well I was wondering. Were you told to see mom later like I was?" He asked as he licked his spoon of chacolate ice cream. "Ya. Wonder what she wants?" "Well huh. DC what aboutt you?" Dc looked at hijar and shrugged. "Yes she did. I think. wasn't paying attention." Hijar stared at him. "Well okay." talastood up and went toward the door. "Well you to. I'm going to take a shower. And if that nerd Tom Jenny calls tell him I'm sleeping." "Will do sis." hijar replied. "Will you?" Asked DC. "No. I tell him she's showering. I also tell him there is a camera near the window. He falls for it." "hmmm well maybe you should tell him to stop calling." "Eh." Replied Hijar. "Well lets go take a shower to. But first lets take a trip to your closet." hijar then laughed. "Just kidding. Let's go" Dc and Hijar went through the door. [CENTER]_____________________________________[/CENTER] So there you all have it. The recreated Demon of the south. Enjoy.

[CENTER]This story isn't about Sora. This story is about the past.[/CENTER] [CENTER]-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-[/CENTER] 1000 years ago a war raged on the worlds. It used to be that only one person could have a keyblade. A warrior of light. But a generation had them almost completely. During the war an academy was built to teach the basics to keyblade fighting. As well as magic and ability teachings. You must have been 13 in order to join this academy. The world was only known to the teachers, students, ands the war veterans. As well as war officials. So far the war has lasted 100 years. 50 years had passed with no academy. So the idea of one was new to the people. But this year the academy ust say farewell. After graduation a new type of academy will be built. A better one. Celebrations have been held a lot. Guests, veterans, generals, even celebraties were there. people started hearing about the academy. The school chancellor was using this to an advantage. he could get the academy famous and keep it going. The government learned about his plans and fired him. Vice chancellor Nuvic is now in charge. He plans to shut down the academy. [CENTER]-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-[/CENTER] But beside all that the students have been working harder than ever. 5 classes for fighting and magic. As well as regular school to teach the things they could only learn, in the academy. 1 student in particular is above the best. Preppy, rude, annoying. He has it all. Albel Jetfare is the name of this, stuck up student. Son of Chancellor Nuvic's son as well. He plans to destroy the school with a giant recking ball. The schools students (The seniors.) have become lazy. Exept a few. Well maybe not a few. This is... [FONT=Verdana] [CENTER][COLOR=BloodRed][SIZE=9]Th[COLOR=DarkRed]e[/COLOR][COLOR=DarkRed] Acade[/COLOR]my.[/SIZE][/COLOR][/CENTER][/FONT] [CENTER]\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/ [/CENTER] [SIZE=6]Academy.[/SIZE] [COLOR=Green][SIZE=4][CENTER]Academy central[/CENTER][/SIZE] - This is none other than the academy's location. Marked by a giant sign that says "Academy walkway". This path is 1 mile long and must be walked. But the academy decided to stretch it to 5 miles as a test for the freshmen. This path is bordered by beautiful red leaved trees. No matter the season the leaves are red. Behind the academy lies training forest. The outside area sarrounding the academy is known as "Academy central". Stores are located there for food, games and equipment needed for practice. The school supplies the students with money.[/COLOR] [COLOR=Sienna][SIZE=4][CENTER]Training Forest [/CENTER] [/SIZE] - An academy school ground. The students train here, talk with friends, and play. It's like a playground exept no one watches the students. Exept cameras. The forest has a gate that has been there before the academy was built. The builders decided to give it a touch of school by putting a banner on the gate. The banner has the words "Training grounds." on it.[/COLOR] [COLOR=Navy][SIZE=4][CENTER]Forgotten Santum[/CENTER][/SIZE] - This place is an area for only the brave. if a student is man enough Or brave enough) The will tread the grounds. It used to be a mansion. But due to the academy being built the mansion was moved. Now ghosts and heartless roam it's halls. The building is covered in ivy. Roses line the walkway entering the building. Dead roses. 7 Students have been reported missing in the building. What is it's secret? Nobody knows.[/COLOR] [CENTER]-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-[/CENTER] [SIZE=6]Worlds.[/SIZE] [COLOR=RoyalBlue][SIZE=4]Spirak[/SIZE][/COLOR] [COLOR=RoyalBlue]This world is full of monsters and weird people. During the war the monsters were captured and used as weapons during the war. The world is covered in beutiful green fields. But behing the beauty lies a deadly world. Only experienced soldieers may even think about coming here. But one area is completly baron of monsters. A field of radiation blocks people from enering. An old laboratory is located in the area. The government wants to use it as a base. But first must get rid of the radiation. [/COLOR] [COLOR=SandyBrown][SIZE=4][CENTER]Eyitan[/CENTER][/SIZE] This planet is nothing but desert. The battle of guru was held here. Civilization is huge though. Vast oases covor the deserts. Field trip time for the students. A 7 day break for students. The planet is well known as a vacation spot.[/COLOR] [COLOR=DimGray][SIZE=4][CENTER]Ravensprout[/CENTER].[/SIZE] This planet is known for it's canyons. Mostly used for army bases. Birds are beasts here. Named for it's raven's. These birds are vicious here. Pocking peoples eyes out. Stealing. The god bird talks to the soldiers. He is peacful. But turns hypnotic when shiny oblects catch it's eye. He can carve keychains out of stone. Many keyblades have been discovered here. The canyon's are black. Night time is non existing here. But the sun stays nice and cool. The perfect place for a base. Rain is very rare. but a giant lake is always being rained on. Giving the planet life.[/COLOR] [CENTER]-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-[/CENTER] [SIZE=6]Battle types[/SIZE] [CENTER][SIZE=4]fighter- This is normal basic fighting. Use of power mostly. Hard hitting attaacks with no combos cahined. Defense creaking. People using this type of fighting must be physicly fit. Slow but effective against slower enemies. Drive form - This is a style were transforming is induced. Utilizing the keyblade to it's fullest. Attacks come in different styles. Hard hitting, stratigic fighting, and even acrobatic moves acan be used in this style. No exact body recemended. Depends on style hoice. Gunfighting - The use of projectiles. Either grenades or shooting from the keyblade. Not much is really needed for detail. It's a simple battle type. But swift bodies must be used. The faster your reaction to others the better you are. Keyblade control - The use of keyblade. You can use this style to make your keyblade hover arround. mental states of mind are usually needed for this type. This is also known as mental keyblading. You must be smart, and mentally strong. Also you need to know when to quit fighting. Berserk style - The use of combos. Chains, combos, endless attacks. Anything to bring down the house. You have to be really strong, fast, agile, and must have high stamina to pull this style of. Ony for the very skilled. he hardest style to achieve.[/SIZE][/CENTER] [CENTER]-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-\-[/CENTER] [SIZE=6]magic types[/SIZE] [SIZE=4][CENTER]White magic - The use of healing magic. And even increasing resistance to other magics. The easiest form and the most helpful. Black magic - Using elemental magic. Examples : Fire, water, thunder, etc. Or even using status enducing spells. Like paralisys, poison, Silence, etc. It is quite useful when confrontingelemental monsters. Summoning magic - The sbility to summon creatures to battle. Only women are allowed to use this. Probably because only women are capable of using it. Some men have tooken steps in order to use summoning magic. But males have to have a certain bloodline. The most skill draining magic. Copycat magic - The ability to copy moves permenetly or een take the same action as others. Men use this skill to copy summoning spells. Or even taking on the form of someone. Pranksters misuse this magic to fool around like idiots. The most useful of magics. red magic - The ability to use elemental magic to transform body parts. If you want to transform your arm into poison ivy, you can. If you want tornadoes on your fists, you can. Easy to use. Defensive people use it to shield themslves against other magics. Not a lot of people pick it thogh because of one cost. You might get your matter fused with someone else. Turning you into a freak.[/CENTER][/SIZE] [CENTER]\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/ [/CENTER] [SIZE=6]Sign-ups[/SIZE] Name: Anything. As long as it's not a disney charecter. Nor can you be sora or any of the regular KH characters. 1 exeption though. You can be a pasy member of organization 13. But you must be killed by a heartless during your senior year at the academy. Age: How old your character is. He/she may be from age 18 to 20 because that's about how old seniors usually are. People past the age of 19 have been held back or weren't able to be in the academy that year. Blood type: a+, a-, o+, o-. Or any other bloodtype. As long as it exists. If you become a member of organization 13 you can put none for a bloodtype. battle Type: Any of the five stated above. magic type: Any of the five stated above. Women charaecters must have a second magic. Summoning magic. Weapon: What's your keyblade look like? Is it shaped like a katana? Does it have a design made just for it? And if you want a new one later on PM me about it so i can give you the o.K. Abilities: What magic and keyblade skills does the character have. Tell thre then give three more that your charecter will learn later on. Personality: What he/she is like. Is he/she nice or mean? History: What happened to let him/her into the academy? Did something change them? The characters past is all here. Appearence (image, or discription, or even both): what he/she looks like. What clothes does the character usually wear. Biograph/charecter snipet. (optional): [CENTER]\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/\/ [/CENTER] OOC: And by the way. Please post in regular font size. My computer is in a bind. I can't read small print. If you do post in small print I will just send a PM telling you of the problem. Or if any other questions arouse yor interest PM too.

Well actualy I just fell back into ygotcg when I was in MTG. I also just bought a new game for my GBA. Yu-Gi-Oh Ultimate Masters WC 06 has all the up to date cards. So I recomend that. It has password mode but that costs DP. Xerocreative has an onliine duelists thing you download the game and the cards. You can make a deck offline but play with it on the net. But that's all I can tell you due to the rules.

Could a moderator please close this up? The reason is I'm restarting Demon of the South. A new storyline, characters, etc. So I would like to restart the thread. Thank you in advance. -Split

[quote name='Baron Samedi][size=1][I]NUH-UH NEVA SED SO IN DA ROOLZ ABOUT IT SO NYAH![/I'][/SIZE][/quote] actually I lost my passward. So I used to be the annoying GUNmanZERO7. I've even posted that before. Didn't get in trouble. The lost password did not help at all!!!

Ummm Dagger. This is a dead thread. No necromancy? Or is it Ok? Well if so i liked the game. Episode three will be out soon. [color=navy][size=1][url=http://www.otakuboards.com/showthread.php?t=37270][u]Read[/u][/url] and learn. - Dagger[/size][/color]

Well looky. It's oppisite day. Wait it's not oppisite day. Since it is that dreadfull time of year. i have won this game!!! Applause for no sense of logic at all. Boo me!

[quote name='Boo][size=1']Man, that main character is rather sexy if I may say so. This'll most likely get very blimey. I'm best friends with Retribution and Sandy. :^D[/size][/quote] I wouldn't go into a complete state of denile if I were you Boo. Then again as they say big feet big... Ego. On a serious note this will be funny as hell!!! Can't wait for episode 1. but I wouldn't want to be the guy that says "My leg!!'' All the time. Is that part still open?

Okay to all of you RPer's out there. You will soon taste a new RP. Keyblade Wielder will be helping me (But since she hasn't been on in a while.) But due to those curcumstances I will be hiring someone to help me lay out the well layout. An art director if you will. I do not have photoshop. (or any of those) So I will be hiring someone to help me with A: Backround under the typed letters. B: To help make a banner. C: To find some KH rp music. Original melody with no words. And D: Someone to help moderate the RP from time to time along with me. As of now a KH rpg is undergoing. So after KW's creation I will (and with assistant help) release This Kh RPG based on the keyblade war. i have readied a backround story to help lift the RPG. To check it out go a little under to read. But before that.Keyblade design, story board and other jobs will also be launched. Or even pics of Heartless, and nobodies. I want this RP to launch smoothly. So here goes. _____________________________________ Before Sora. Before his legacy. This is the... Keyblade War 1000 years ago a war savaged all worlds. A war that started a reign of living hell onto the universe. No one knows who or what started the keyblade war. But everybody knows who must decide the fate of all worlds. During the war everybody lived their lives like normal people. But as for the men and women that faught in the war. They had a completely different story. They took out on the opposite side, anger and strength. blood and dead bodies covered the ground. Sin stained the trees and death brung forth meaning to the battle fiels. For in war there is only 1 ultimate rule. SURIVE Everybody back then that wanted to be in the war realised something. They would become a puppet for the military. Schools were devised to teach battle and magic. you had to be 13 in order to join this academy. No older. No younger. You must have been mentally capable. And physicly fit. But since you had to be 13 in order to enter this academy they taught the students basic school. Science. Health. The normal everyday stuff. for 5 years students had to be ready for long grueling days of work. With battling or paper tests. The only real brake was when classes switched. or weekends. Women were taught no different from the men. For everybody knew that they were tools. BUT NOT ALL OF THEM WERE TOOLS. Five basics of magic were taught. As well as 5 different battle types. But for women they had to do three types. But the second one was the same class that the other girls had. It was summoning class. the five available classes to each form *(Being Battle or Magic.) were limated to power. Some classes would have you excersive during the weekend or Exersice class just to get the strength to join up. The normal school time was the only chance to meet friends and feel regular. the 10 different classes that were in the academy didn't matter to them at that time. They only had to do school work like homework or coloring papers. Studying for both kinds of schools was another grueling task. But for some odd reseon later years emphasized that the teens were not tools. So finnally the war had become different. Every ten years the waar ended. A 1 year pause. Brothers that were turned against each other became family again. and all the keyblades were locked in a giant vault. This vault had other vaults inside. With the keychains not the keyblades. (The basic keyblade form.) Our story begins with senior year for some cadets. The last month that they would be able to stay at the academy. Luckily the pause that lasted a year was during that year. So instead of heading straight into battle the students could see there familys. But as for these students. Graduation will come late. This is the story of a war that lasted 150 years. The last year. The students you are about to meet will change history. FOREVER. _________________________________________ So if anybody wishes to apply PM me. Or post here. (I preffere PM because I always check new messages no matter what.) The jobs available are Producer- this person will help prommote the RPG (Banner's or siggy.) Also the producer will PM other's with updates and new ideas. Art directer- To get backround, music, and an introduction picture for the RP. Someone with either great art expertiece or photoshop (or other.) Image finder- What? well this person will help create new bosses or regular enemies. Such as heartless, or nobodies. Battle system and magic system - This person will help me with the battle system and magic system. I have ideas of academic types. So we will start from there. And last but not least. moderator No this person will not close the thread or stuff like that. This person will help me check players characters, actions, and check if people are breaking the rules. _______________________________________ It may seem ike a tough job but it won't be. When jobs are taken I will cross out the job listed above. If there are also problems with the above story let me know by posting PM me.

Point taken. Guess condoms from then out. But I am utterly speechless. Why? I don't know. I have now been affiacly 14eened. Am I for real? I don't even know. :sleep:

The series is awesome!!!! [spoiler]Gaara transforms?![/spoiler] It's on this saturday Cartoon Network. GO OROCHIMARU!!!!! [COLOR=#99121c][SIZE=1][FONT=Comic Sans MS]Some people may not know that yet, the ones watching it from CN atleast. ~Ikillion[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]

[quote name='Retribution][size=1']So you're not willing to get a vasectomy, but you expect your wife to tie her tubes? That's a lame double standard. How about you just use contraception so that neither one of you have to deal with all those procedures?[/size][/quote] Well my mother had her's tied after I was born. Not directly after. But Maybe we could wait till we are OLD AND DECREPID!!!! By then remembering sex will be hard. "Was it fun for you?" "I can't remember." [QUOTE=Farto the Magic]I would do it in a box. I would do it with a fox. I would do it in a house. I would do it with a spouse. I would do it here or there. I would do it anywhere. I would do green eggs and ham. But I still would not do Sam-I-am.[/QUOTE] I concur. Well I'm only 13 what am I supposed to do?

Well personaly I would make other manga storylines and see which one people like best. The idea sounds good. But have a second idea for a manga. Just in case you don't get good lift on your story. So have a second salution just in case. When I first started I had two ideas suporting one basis of my story. Should they be the egyption god or just be named it? Well actually i quit that idea for a historical fiction. But fantasy is more my feel. But you could do that with a story. 2 ideas based around the same thought. Animal transformation cool. But have two story lines based around that. When you think of a story.

Could someone please create a banner and an avatar that I can use to sponser my story Demon of the South. It is in the OB but I am currently making the story again. (Due to problems with storylin and characters.) So it won't be used right away. But A banner that is red with any design (prefferably guyish.) Like blood or fire. As for the avatar just make that a simple blue color with the word Demon in it. As for the banner put "The Southern Blood is Set." on it. I will put the link to the post under it. so the banner won't have the link. It would be apriciated very much. Ticle Blue has been helping me with the story so I want to make it a good story. So that's the reason for the avi and banner. Thanks. -Split.