Mitch Posted April 17, 2002 Share Posted April 17, 2002 [color=red]Deep Thought[/color] [color=green]I wander deep in thought[/color] [color=red]remembering things long forgot[/color] [color=green]feelings converge in perpendicular fits[/color] [color=red]curving all to one slit[/color] [color=green]I reach deep inside[/color] [color=red]seeing life from within my mind[/color] [color=green]a treasure cove of finds[/color] [color=blue]all the boxes marked with signs[/color] [color=red]I dig deep into all those vines[/color] [color=green]conversing into my own self[/color] [color=red]looking on shelf upon shelf[/color] [color=green]seeing the great valley of sacred secrets[/color] [color=red]only there for the keeper[/color] [color=green]suddenly it all blurs[/color] [color=red]collapsing in unknown slurrs[/color] [color=green]I return to my own strife[/color] [color=red]the entrance of my life[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jamvis Posted April 29, 2002 Share Posted April 29, 2002 nice dude.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Morph Posted April 29, 2002 Share Posted April 29, 2002 Thats really good... I like it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Shift Posted April 29, 2002 Share Posted April 29, 2002 [color=royalblue][b]Nice... I like it at least.[/color][/b] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest cloricus Posted May 4, 2002 Share Posted May 4, 2002 What is with the colours or mainly the one blue line? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flipmodesquad Posted May 5, 2002 Share Posted May 5, 2002 Nice again.Im telling you post your peoms on [url]www.poetry.com[/url] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raiha Posted May 6, 2002 Share Posted May 6, 2002 [COLOR=seagreen]Well, maybe he wanted to acent that particular line. I should do that with my work to...[/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted May 6, 2002 Author Share Posted May 6, 2002 [color=blue]lol, the blue line :). I don't know why I put it there, now that I think of it...not really any reason...lol...well, I suppose I will post a few on poetry.com, I also plan to send them to [url]www.otakupoetry.com[/url] if I get to it.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Geist Posted May 6, 2002 Share Posted May 6, 2002 That was really good. A lot better than I could ever come up with. :D I liked all of the lines, but here was one I thought was good. [I]"conversing into my own self looking on shelf upon shelf "[/I] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlueGender Posted May 6, 2002 Share Posted May 6, 2002 I really like the poetry my favorite part was the ending though. "I return to my own strife the entrance of my life" You could become a profesional in my opinion you might want to consider submitting them to some literary magazines. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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