Mitch Posted April 17, 2002 Posted April 17, 2002 [color=red]Deep Thought[/color] [color=green]I wander deep in thought[/color] [color=red]remembering things long forgot[/color] [color=green]feelings converge in perpendicular fits[/color] [color=red]curving all to one slit[/color] [color=green]I reach deep inside[/color] [color=red]seeing life from within my mind[/color] [color=green]a treasure cove of finds[/color] [color=blue]all the boxes marked with signs[/color] [color=red]I dig deep into all those vines[/color] [color=green]conversing into my own self[/color] [color=red]looking on shelf upon shelf[/color] [color=green]seeing the great valley of sacred secrets[/color] [color=red]only there for the keeper[/color] [color=green]suddenly it all blurs[/color] [color=red]collapsing in unknown slurrs[/color] [color=green]I return to my own strife[/color] [color=red]the entrance of my life[/color]
Guest Shift Posted April 29, 2002 Posted April 29, 2002 [color=royalblue][b]Nice... I like it at least.[/color][/b]
Guest cloricus Posted May 4, 2002 Posted May 4, 2002 What is with the colours or mainly the one blue line?
Flipmodesquad Posted May 5, 2002 Posted May 5, 2002 Nice again.Im telling you post your peoms on [url]www.poetry.com[/url]
Raiha Posted May 6, 2002 Posted May 6, 2002 [COLOR=seagreen]Well, maybe he wanted to acent that particular line. I should do that with my work to...[/COLOR]
Mitch Posted May 6, 2002 Author Posted May 6, 2002 [color=blue]lol, the blue line :). I don't know why I put it there, now that I think of it...not really any reason...lol...well, I suppose I will post a few on poetry.com, I also plan to send them to [url]www.otakupoetry.com[/url] if I get to it.[/color]
Geist Posted May 6, 2002 Posted May 6, 2002 That was really good. A lot better than I could ever come up with. :D I liked all of the lines, but here was one I thought was good. [I]"conversing into my own self looking on shelf upon shelf "[/I]
BlueGender Posted May 6, 2002 Posted May 6, 2002 I really like the poetry my favorite part was the ending though. "I return to my own strife the entrance of my life" You could become a profesional in my opinion you might want to consider submitting them to some literary magazines.
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