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Details details details. Hell ya!! This was full of intense anger and love. I loved the fact that Mr. may and chad were the ones to help Kiala and Ria. I smiled when I read that part. The f'er Al is dead. Yay!!! An adventure huh? well can't wait for chapter 7!!!

I'm only 13 what do I care. Actually i care a lot. People my age can't wait to "Do it". Wonder why. Eh guys will be guys I guess. "Get the lube" I guess. Anywho i can't wait till health classes "Sex talk". (Being sarcastic) As told by ginger was funny when all the girls saw a baby coming out. Yes I watched as told by ginger. But techniquely Cosmo reveals some facts. I read an article. Curiosity killed the dog. if you get the joke. So hopefully my wife knows what it means to "Get your tubes tied,." Only one kid for me. Otherwise no sex afterwords. Not getting a visectamy. No way are my boys going to get killed. So to speak. But positions aren't all that good to use. Make one up yourself. Kama sutra my ***!!! Unless your hu hephner who has had rigor mortis more times then a graveyard. :D So really is it fun? i hope so. But guys take head. I ummm meant heed. Sorry :animenose . but guys have substitutes It will not be said on here but.Jack might know. hint hint.

I loved the movie. When quagmire and brian were talking So funny! Brian :Hey quagmire doesn't country have an o in it" "Quagmire: Not this one Or when stewie presses the buttons brian fell on his lap. "Stewie do something!" "I'm afraid to press anything else." Comedy has a second side. RANDOMNESS MUCH!!!

[quote name='Tical Blue']It very much reminded me of something you'd see in an Adult Swim show, more speciifically 12 Ounce Mouse. It was totally random and strange, but it that way cool. I didn't laugh... but then I don't laugh at 12oz.Mouse, and I still love it. Your story is pretty cool.[/quote] I agree. Totally random. Just like perfect hair forever. It also didn't make me laugh. But I love it. [QUOTE=Boo]Retribution: Can we keep himmmm??? PLEEEEEEASE MOMMY? Boris: Sure, but make sure to feed him. He's YOUR responsibility! Retribution pulls a sad face. Retribution: Fiiiiiiine. Boris: Now what do we say, little boy?[/QUOTE] Funniest part. 5 thumbs up!!

andom thought but. Do you have any dark poetry? It can catagorize in all ratings. From bloody to bewildering. From sad to sarrow. Anything dark. State the rating by naming your post. So people's caution can be heeded. As for me I will post soon. Hold tight. but first here's one rated Pg. i hold myself dark. like fire I spark. Death has meaning. Death be gleeming. Through and through the hallways. Till you find the pathways. When you reach me I'll be dead. Craddle my dead head. So post them here. keep to the rules and have fun.

okay so what does your bedroom look like? Random i know but. i thought of it just now because I got my room redone. Well for me the ciling is red red wine. And the walls are ink black. My trash can is black, bed sheets, and even my comfroter. My entertainment stand is amazing. Brown matches black. I have my sterio on the top. No I'm not emo or goth. just very deeply disturbed. Well as people say. But tell your rooms looks here. keep stuff clean. We don't want to now f you have a blow up dall. -Split

Here's a hint. Never have it with a sofa. Don't tell anybody. Don't do it again. I did it. Yes I did lose my virginity to a sofa. Well to an object that is. It was fun but cushany. So remember sofa sex is bad sex.

I have another story about that pamela girl. Well she went to the doctors that day. When she came back people sked her "Where were you?" So Matt white (another class mate) said "She probably went to get her tubes tied." I didn't laugh. The teacher was right there. He didn't get in bad trouble. But it was halarious. And the girl I love to this day came to school. I ride her bus too. But anyways her sister got on the bus but the girl wasn't there. She lved in Utica so the info wasn't completely sent to the school. Well a couple of days later she was our class. Her name was Brandie. She loves anime and manga. She is short. Everything like me. (except she was a girl and I was a guy.) I fell in love with her that same day she came to the school. Insult to love but. She was so much like me. We became friends quick.

[QUOTE=Tical Blue]Analogy time. Look... when a movie doesn't do well, it gets pulled from theatres, forgotten, and they don't make a sequal. Your story does not need a sequal, it needs a makeover. The first five chapters of this story are without quality... they are not good. They need to be pulled from existance. Before you build onto this story, you need to fix what's here already. Even if your new chapters are great, it won't matter if the beginning sucks. Keep your story, but retool it. As far as the 5 chapters Ive read go, don't even try to repair them, just totally redo them.[/QUOTE] Well. i'll do it!!!!! But what about the later chapters? Keep um? Well anyways soon I will just get this locked up and restart ch 1-4.

[QUOTE=Petie][font=Verdana][color=blue]My second loss is upon me [strike]though my win record now stands at three days (assuming you can win again after you've lost once).[/color][/font] [font=Verdana][color=blue]Actually, the first I heard of this game was years ago so technically, was I winning all of this time I had completely forgotten about it?[/strike][/color][/font] [font=Verdana][color=#0000ff][/color][/font] [b][font=Verdana][color=#0000ff]Edit:[/color][/font][/b] [font=Verdana][color=#0000ff]After reading the Wikipedia article, I guess I have been winning for years. Oh well, so much for that.[/color][/font][/QUOTE] What wikipedia entry? Telll meeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!

Well people have interesting stories. I myself have something to add. In my school whores run a muck. One of my friends (he's also an OB member) Josh was brought to a treehouse. This girl was Pamela Fifield. A name that strikes fear into peoples hearts. She tried to force him to have sex with her. What a *****. in my school if you don't fit in you are gay. Strange. I don't fit in that well myself but eh. And by now most of us kids knew about sex before we were even told. And health class will be a breeze. he-he-he-uh. Well belive me I have tons of stories to tell. never have sex with somebody at our school. When we turn 50 people will say "That kid's hopeless." rumors there spread faster than the black plaugue did. Believe me. You don't wanna know what I did. :animenose

[QUOTE=Tical Blue]Ah... Jeez, where to start. First let me state that there are tons of spelling errors, but I feel I have no right to complain as I misspell all kinds of stuff. Anywho, let's begin with the dialogue. As I told you in the PM about CH5 the dialogue is totally unrealistic. This is especially true in the 4th chapter. People who are in the middle of battle don't speak as if in mid-conversation, and by no means does anyone say the word ass that many times. In fact, the spider dude actually said. "Ass." WTF does that mean?! Your characters do not act like regular people. They go into each situation like it's normal, regular crap and thy seem totally unphased and uninterested. They have no emotions, apparently, either. Their reactions to DC's true identity was totally underwhelming considering he is their best friend. Also, why does Hijar apparently hate the sister he is trying to save? While on the subject of your characters, I don't care about them. They're all just totally uninteresting and unmemorable. Hijar seems like he's supposed to be the cliche leading male anime character, but he doesn't have enough showtime to support that. Tala just doesn't seem to have any personality whatsoever. DC is obviously a tank, but that's all we really know about him. The new girl seems to have a bit more personality, seeming to be the cute, spunky type, but her lines are just horrifying. Now, as I said before, your descriptions have got a little better, but still - to be rank - are poor. Things just happen way to fast and don't give time to visualize or comprehend. for instance, the fight scenes are just like "he trew his chain and caught his leg. Then he threw him. But he got up and slashed." It's just not all that exciting to read. I actually got so bored during CH2 that I started skimming paragraphs. Speaking of paragraphs, your formatting is confusing. At times I can't tell who is talking and due to some missing quotation marks, text and dialogue are sometimes confused. Try breaking pparagraphs at qutation marks or bolding them or something. Keep practicing, dude. At the very least, you're getting better.[/QUOTE] i see all that you see. But hehe. Ummmmm ho do I split this into a couple of words. Well I shouldn't. Does the songle word "Sequal" mean anything to you? Yes there will be a sequal. But along a different route. Maybe an internet site explaining this should be in order? Should I? Well anyways, once the secret about this demon is unleashed Hijar will be changing a lot. From a prince into a legendary hero. etc etc etc.

I actually used to be GUNmanZERO7. Yes that idiotic member. Well that was when i didn't know that names could be changed. So stare at me for a sec. Notice anything different. Well there is no change except a) more friends on here b) Actually started an RP. and c) I know better. but I would like to follow somebodies footsteps. KW gave me the nickname Split. And I used to be Ålpha-Æpsilon. So people just call me "Split" or "SK".

Why did I say 6th grade? Well I was just thinking about the subject then poof!! IDEA!!!!! Well anyho what was your experience in 6th grade like? Ups? Downs? Friends? What? It doesn't matter if it was during school of out of school. Summer vacation before or after. As long as it consists of that period in time. Well for me It was great. In 5th I was the most unpopular person in my class. but next year whoaaa!!!!! Switching classes lets you know people better. And you are also the 2nd shortest kid there. Anyways back in 1st I loathed the fact that I was taking the year again. But now that's probably been the greatest thing to happen to me. A new kid come. He becomes your friend. His name was Dillion. He called me gay during lunch. (Everyone did. But only at lunch.) Then later I find that one of those kids is indeed GAY!!!!!! Later on Dillion and me were in a project together. (Teacher picked) And he starts talking about that gay issue. He was just playing around with me. But when he found out that the kid was gay we finnally had better foundation. During lunch Dillion tried to escape the gay kid. When he got up the gay did too. End of the year your friends are more friend like. We had fun times. Taling bout stupid stuff. I even entered a yo mamma contest with a girl there. I won. Now during break I spend my time HERE!!!!!! And the fact that you have had a first. (Which most of us guys were) Changes you. COMPLETELY!!!!! but anyways share your experience here.

Kindergarten - Ohhh look. Mean friend coming your way. 1st - Let that girl on the computer. Or your teacher becomes a *****. 1st (2nd year.) Holy crap!! I never finished things I started. Big *** deal. 2nd : What do yo u know school is kind of gay. 3rd. You can tell a teachers a witch, She says you role your eyes at her. WHEN YOU DIDN'T!! 4th. Another *****!!!! Subjested to sex. or at least learned it. (From my best friend.) 5th :Nice teacher. Good friends. only bout 7 though. 6th - If you've had sex with your lving room sofa DON'T TELL ANYBODY!!! Now : You havn't kissed a girl!!! So what. Improvise. NEW ROOMS ROCK!!! and Somebody lost their virginity. To their cousin. (it wasn't me. My friend did.) :animenose 7th - well not yet. but! Maybe I will get a chick to kiss and love. And kiss.

if you jumble the letters in Xemnas you get the word "Mansex". Personnaly I think that's funny. Tetsuya should have seen his nameing problem. If he knows english at all. Xemnas. Mansex. Who is tis mysterious man?

okay I have decided to post chapter 2 through 4. So i can get you guys up to par on the story. Don't read them all at once if you don't want to. Come back later then read the next one. Chapter 2: The adventuring begining [img]http://img483.imageshack.us/img483/3349/tek060731e18d95mx8.png[/img] No face As hijar, Tala, and DC came back to te castle the queen spoke to them. "Mom what do you need?" Asked Tala. "Well daughter, son. your sister is ina prostitution ring." Replied the queen. "that is why I wanted you to look for her. Find her bring her back. She must be brought back. your sister Yulian will be joining you. She is waiting outside. First go to Valnar city and find directions to Stranthea Kingdom. My advisor has found that your sister resides there. Now go get your weapons and go to your sister. good luck." The 3 went to their rooms and got their weapons. They walked to the area of the castle where Princess Yulian was located. The clouds grew dark with resentment. "Well are you guys redy?" Asked Yulian. "Ya we are." Replied Tara. "Good then off to the city you go." "But sis I thought you were going to come to?" "Mom always wants me to come with you." She replied. But I'm going to just give you a map." Their sister was always dressed in pink. She was always lazy and gave crap to noboby. Her eyes were always angry. but she wasn't rude, just lazy. "Well see you later then." Tala said. DC turned into the dragon once more. Flying off. "The map says to go to the southern checlkpoint." Said Hijar. The clouds roared back at them. With anger. They landed and waited til nightfall. _________________________________________ Warning: Some sexual content. Chapter 3 :The Demon of the Clouds' true identity, Fight against no face. [img]http://img483.imageshack.us/img483/7800/tek060801a35372np9.png[/img] DC's true form. Hijar woke up that morning soon after. He noticed his sister asleep. But DC was gone. "Tala wake up." Said Hijar. "i'm up." Tala replied. "DC is gone. We have to look for him." "Okay I have to get my stuff." Replied Tala. she got out a plushie, angelbow and a whip. She snaped the whip then went to Hijar. Hijar had dressed up in his armor and had out his two swords. "Well lets go." Hijar said. The two had reaced the top of a hill. They saw DC training. "Hey DC!" yelled Hijar. "Oh you guys." He replied solemnly. "I was just training. I saw a man near the camp, followed him and found myself here." "Who was the man?" Asked Tala. "Well I don't know he had no face. But he did have on a tux." Hijar closed his eyes but could not think of who a no face person is. Tala pondered but nothing came to mind. Then out of the blue twelve crows formed a circle around Hijar, Tala and DC. "Well then if you don't know I could tell you." Said a mysterious voice. hijar looked at him. He had no face. It was indeed the man DC chased. "I have no name. i choose no face. I can talk but only because I have a small almost invisable mouth. your sister Uriay, hijar is doing good as the bosses prostitute. I've indeed had my taste of her." hijar held out his sword. "She may be a bitch. But she's my sister. Oh, who am I kidding. I hate her guts." No face walked toward Hijar but stopped cold. "No way will I allow you to touch them." Said DC. Dc jumped back and stuck his javelins into the ground. He glowed Red then jumped into the air. Like lightning he shoked the others. He transformed into a man that Tala could not resist. he had chains flow around him. As a sword glowed silver. His shoes still the same. but his pants transformed. Surely his true for unleashed. "So if it isn't Sephnare's brother Ferrill." hijar and Tala stared blankly at no face. "Who?" Asked Tala. "Why none other then the pimp that Uriay works for. He is kind but to you he'd rather kill." Replied no face as he laughed. "Well guys I guess you know my real name." Snapped DC as he flew towords no face. No face threw one of his pown lances at Ferrill. It pierced Ferrill"s skin and tore open his body. But it did not stop him. He jolted again at no face. Smashed him to the ground. But no face suddenly poofed away. The real no face hopped on Ferrill, puched him then jumped on the ground. Undaunted, Ferrill flew into the air once more. The chains orbiting him flew at no face. The chains grabbed him. "How do like being tied up." Said ferrill sarcasticly. He then chucked no face into the air. he realesed one of his chains. But the other one brought no face higher. Higher, higher, and higher. "Well once bitten I bite back." Thought no face. Ferrill's chain stopped. the surroundin area was silent. As the clouds shifted, the sun move, the birds flew, as hijar and Tala looked up. The chain started moving. But down. No face was falling and falling. The speed of the drop was stupendious. No face smashed into the ground. The earth crumbled in his wake. Silence once again took the scene. but this time the sun stopped, the clouds stopped, the bird stopped, or so it seemed. "Fool do you think I die that easily." laughed no face. "Well then say ello to my little friends." Suddenly 10 no faces attacked Ferrill. He calapsed. "Well no matter how many of you pop up, I will still win." Said Ferrill. Fire cought. An orb of fire grew over Ferrill and the no face clones. They all died. After the flames stopped Ferrill looked at the real no ace. He then shot his cloak at no faced. No face suffocatted to death. "So much for undeffeatable." laughed Ferrill. Hijar and Tala stared at Ferrill. He turned and moaned. "Did you just moan?" Asked Hijar. "Yes." Replied Ferrill. "What were you moaning about?" "Well, I havn't faught in a while. So I kind of let out a pleasure moan. I used to kill for my own pleasure." Hijar stared still at Ferrill. Well then... let's have breakfast." Said Hijar as he sighed. "Sorry it felt good to kill someone again. Damn. I swore on my life I wouldn't kill again. it was to protect you so it doesn't matter." Ferril turned back. "But still call me DC. I think it suits me better." _________________________________________________ Chapter 4:New ally. And the fight against Rakshad's lackeys. [img]http://img205.imageshack.us/img205/7686/tek060803325894vi9.png[/img] Kiaminay Tinselgai [img]http://img227.imageshack.us/img227/7936/tek0608035ebe99ms1.png[/img] Blackened Lackey [img]http://img103.imageshack.us/img103/1513/tek060803cd6634pe6.png[/img] Purpled lackey [img]http://img147.imageshack.us/img147/591/tek060803e27f83lx4.png[/img] Red Lackey [img]http://img205.imageshack.us/img205/4662/tek060803e79993ui4.png[/img] After a day of training everyone got up to leave. They ventured to another checkpoint. Thus marking there half way mark. "So where are we headed?" Asked DC. "Well we are heading to Valar kingdom. We are half way. But it will take more time than it did to come here." "Why Hijar?" Asked Tala. "Well there are the Forgotten hills. Plus the lake of Valar." "So in other words it will be one wild ride?" Asked DC. "You don't know the half of it." Replied Hijar. They headed off after a good meal. They ate turkey. Extravagent beefstew with toasted sandwhiches. Lobster and most specialy the drinks. Soda pop was all settled in their stomachs. they reached a small treeline. Hijar went to the bathroom behind a bush. Unkown to him the bush had a hole. DC covered Tala's eyes to hide her view of the horror. They moved on. The lush valleys stopped Tala. She admired the new land. Because she had never left the kingdom she brought a camera to acomadate her travels. The group stopped at a rock. "What do we do now?" Asked Hijar. he looked at the others. they shrugged and nodded no. "Maybe we can fly over that thing.!" "No we can't." Said DC. "I can't fly in my real form. It will take a week before my false body returns." "Why the hell does the wrighter have to be such a story twister?" Asked Hijar. "well without them the story woulb be boring." Replied tala. "I see. Well I guess we have to climb." "Hell no." Replied DC. Just then a scream for help broke out. Suddenly a girl came from nowhere and charged into Hijar. They both fell down. "Help me. A man is attacking me." She said. "But your holding weapons." Replied Hijar. "Well there are 8 of them." yelled the girl back. Sudddenly another character entered the scene. A group of them to be exact. 4 were dressed in black. 2 in purple, and 1 in red. "Well I guess we might have our hands full." Said Tala. Dc threw his spear at 2 of the black ones. They died. "Why was that so easy?" ASked DC to himself. Hijar jumped at the red one. he was not so easy to kill of. he threw himself at Hijar. Knocking him down. "Damn this one is strong." Said Hijar. Hijar thrusted himself forword. Using his swords to stop himself. He then bolted at the red colored enemy. Bursting energy from his swords. Falling down the red enemy died. DC killed the last 2 of the black ones. Tala's problem was being handled well. She shot her bow and whiped the purple ones with all her might. Wraping them around and strangling them at the waist. "Need a spanking?" She yelled as she threw them into the air. She jumped into the air. She smacked their bottoms.Thus they welted. And died due to no air in their bodies. "Well that's taken care of she said as the others stared at her. "Thanks but that was only 7. The man cahsing me made those creatures toi kill. I'm supposed to be his bride. but Screw that.!!!" She hollared. A man spider legs entered the scene. "Princess! Get your fine ass over here." The man yelled. "So thats him?" Asked Hijar. "Yes." The girl replied. "Princess finally." The man said. Hijar kicked dirt into his face. "What the hell is that about?!" He asked. "Your not gonna marry this girl. Ummmmmm whoever you are." "Well I'm Rakshad. Bad to meet you." He replied rubbing his eyes. The girl jumped on him. "Well princess. you are a whore." He yelled. "Ass. anyway get out of here or I will kill you." She yelled. "Get off!" He elled as he lifted the girl. He tossed her off of him. Hijar threw swords at Rakshad's cape. "That will hold him down!" He yelled. DC took his spear and stabbed Rakshad's head. "Damn it. You asses." He yelled as he wraithed in pain. Tala shot an arrow at him. "sJust wanted to do it too." "Okay then. Anyways get off this girl's case." Said Hijar. "Okay just get me to a hospital." Requested Rakshad. As the man looked Hijar was walking away with the others. Rakshad fainted. "Thank you you you hunk!!!!" The girl yelled. "Oh my name is Kiaminay Tinselgai. But just me Kia." She asked. "My name's Hijar. That girl is my sitster, Tala. And the person next to her is Ferrill. Just call him DC." "Well then can I join you guys?" Asked kia. "Well sure." Replied Hijar. He smiled at her. "What a pretty girl." Hijar thought to himself. The group and their newest friend walked into the horizon.

That's the wonderful world of Otakuboards for you. Oh crud. I lost. I tought about the game. So then Des created a game within a game. I give you Des the award for most strategic post!!!

So then Des created spam!!! He fell into a trap. So he shold get a warning. This whole thread shows that even the admin abuses hias power.

well I inflict pain and suffering. I'm nucklear. What am I? *I don't love her anymore. I have lost. But The wars not overrrrrrrrrrrr!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Actually this prostitution ring is a lot more than it seems. These hookers have a secret that will cause a war. Plus the kingdom idea was from my last novel before your princess of blue. And the random scene in an ally is what sets off the story. What's going thursts the reader to know. Chapter 5 got pretty discriptive. The kingdom is not trashy. t's a slum area inside the kingdom. The real kingdom is underground. Many of the secrets lie in the place the character's were. tala was not in the building. As chapter 2 states he has a sister. A kingdom at peace. it is not. It's just prtrayed that way to hide the secrets. In the next chapters (Round # 8 or so) The villian is found out to be a killer. And the "prostitution ring" she is in is actually a lie that the queen made up. She really wants Hijar to KILL the princess. Not find her. And that man is actually to be revealed later on. You see sometimes a story needs the element of surprise. The man wanted hijar to see the spider like man in the building. he happens to be the villian. i will explain the plots later. But anyways the first couple of chapters are like nya so so. but later on I will try my best to create a great story. Chapter 5 is kind of whoa. Hijar loses his virginity lets keep it to that. The Demon of the south will be Hijar. This so called rescue will become a battle to save the kingdoms. I admit it sounds like your story but later on the truth sets in. There really is no prostitution. it happens to be a murderous maniak making women do his bidding. Just strsp yourself in and wait for the ride. It will turn out soon.

*Sings* Lucy was an unarmed soldier in the USA, *sings* Thinking is stupendiously dangarous. Kids do not think like that at home. [QUOTE]How does one post about something you don't think about?[/QUOTE] Sojiro please rephrase that. :animestun

[QUOTE=Boo][size=1]:stupid: Oh my, I had forgotten about the game until I saw this thread again. My record's 17 hours, for now. :

Plus the gaia online avi idea is a nice use. So you can join. Because the system hosts the dream avi on imageshack. So you can paste the link onto the bio and [img] it. I have read his story. (Or her. Don't know if Tical is guy or girl) And an RP would be good. But havn't seen him since friday. 1 week ago.

[quote name='Obesepanda][SIZE=1']This definitely sounds interesting, that is if you even are still interested in the whole roleplay now. The only objection I have the the whole roleplay is the E rating I doubt a keyblade "war" would be for everyone I would expect blood and some foul language, Other than that I would join.[/SIZE][/quote] I was just rating this thread. The real RP would be M for mature due to blood and foul language.