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Oh my! Oh my! Everything is toast!
Oh my! Oh my! The sky is made of toast!
Golden--and bright! It's toast! All right!
Comes in slices of sunlight--Yes! I'll bite!
That's right! I might!
The sky has gone a-rye!
Breakfast! Hooray! Foundation of the day!
Okay!

Oh my! Oh my! Everything is toast!
Oh my! Oh my! The air is made of toast!
So crisp! So fair! I do declare!
Asleep! Awake! I smell it unaware!
I do! I dare,
Come bounding down the stair!
Breakfast! Hooray! Foundation of the day!
Okay!

Oh my! Oh my! Everything is toast!
Oh my! Oh my! The land is made of toast!
No fuss--I crave crust! I must!
Those nooks! Those crannies!
Oh, how I lust for that delicious, flaky crust!
A sluice of butter smoothes my trust!
Pass me seconds! Pass me more!
With my fork, I thrust down to its core!
Breakfast! Hooray! Foundation of the day!
I do not mean to boast,
but I need to shout the wonders of the toast,
so if I may, I'll propose a toast!
Hooray!
Okay!
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If I knew toast made you that happy, I would have given you some for your birthday.

I thought it was interesting how you compared toast to the air and such. That was rather clever. =)
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I've now made some revisions suggested by Alex. I'd say that the poem has improved quite a bit overall. So, while I sift through all these countless replies, :rolleyes: enjoy the new, revised edit.

And nah, I'm not really obsessed with toast. Although when I was young, I was obsessed with French Toast.
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[COLOR=Navy]The best part about this poem in particular is the rythmn. I LOVE the rythmn.

Not bad of a subject choice either.

Three words can describe this poem perfectly?


Awesome! Superb! I'm hungry!

I know that the last one wasn't a word, but what the heck...it made me hungry.

All of your poems dealing with food really really make me hungry...and crave for what ever you write about.

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[SIZE=1]Interesting, most interesting.

A poem about my stable food stuff, I cannot imagine a nicer subject matter or one which would send the reader involuntarily to go and eat some toast to truly appreciate the poem. Great poem, let's have some more about Chinese food or fried steak. [/SIZE]
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[font=arial narrow]Oh god, what I would give for Vegemite and real butter on toast right now.

I love the way you continually do something to change and to impress us. If all you did was write the same sort of poems, then it all would hae gotten old fast. But the way you change it; the cats poem which was indescribably yummy, and now this toast poem with no connotations at all [but with extra zest! ^.~] it all makes it very interesting to keep reading your poems.

For some reason, the poem reminds me of something like Dr Seuss. I think it has to be the exclaimation marks. Have you written anything in Dr Seuss style? If so, where is it? If not, I challenge you to! ^_^[/font]
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