Writing Sing Me to Sleep

[vegeta rocker]

Sing Me To Sleep


Sing me to sleep
like you used to
before
I learned that words
could hurt me
before
flinching became a
reaction to a hug
before
the stars were raped
by astrological maps
before
it took labor for a tree
to grow in a forest
before
you leave
sing me to sleep

This is a diffrent way for me to write, I don't usually focus on these kinds of emotions so tell me if it sucks.

[Sui Generis]

Hey thats good, I like it. The emotions in it are very well put together. I like it alot! Good job!

[spike speigel]

Great poem. I thought it was exceptionally brilliant. I don't know why, but I loved it. I'm not a big fan of poetry, but.....Damn, that was excellent.

[Mist]

[color=crimson][size=1] Oh...my...goodness! That...that was awesome! I don't think I've ever read a poem that was that well and simply written. I really liked the title; it reeled me in from the beginning. I like how you laid everything on the table, and did it simply, and not making it fancy with big words. [b]Very[/b] good job! Winks![/color][/size]

[vegeta rocker]

well! Thats shocking, I am glad you all like it. Maybe i should work on more in that style.

[darkfreak0304]

the emotions ar pretty powerful, dude, i like the poem alot it's pretty nice good work!

[Mitch]

[color=red] It seemed so thought roving, I loved that. I liked how you just threw it all in our face, and made us decipher what it all meant. That I think is one of your better poems, VR. I'd stick with this type of style, and see how it grows. It may just be your thing.[/color]

[Boo]

Well.... Everything is said that I would've said so ill just put it simple: That is [size=5]GREAT![/size]

[Makai Kite]

*cries* That was beautiful! I want to read more!

[vegeta rocker]

I really hope i can write more in that style......don't want to lose a fan base!

[Spikey]

That was great. I think I almost went to sleap when I read it. Great job. Just a little punctuation checks, and it'll be perfect. Great job.