Mitch

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Sara [/i] [SIZE=1]We [strike]ever[/strike] [u][b]never?[/u][/b] had a choice; we had to come here. At least, that?s what we say. I am my own person, and I can [strike]where[/strike] [b][u]wear[/u][/b] whatever the heck I want and still be me. That?s the premise we?ve been working with from Day One, but it?s become so corrupted that we don?t even realize it anymore. [/SIZE] [/QUOTE] [color=red] Up ahead I posted the two errors I noticed and fixed them to as closely as I could guess you may have wanted them. Now, that was actually not too bad. But I think you could've gone deeper into what you were saying, though. But otherwise, that's just a major gripe, because this was actually pretty good. So, yes, I do believe you should polish it more. Very good job, though.[/color]

[color=red] [...This is my first post [i]ever[/i] in this forum, wow...] Yes, all of the methods listed above. And some damn good luck. It's prettyy near-impossible. But I have gotten attacked by, and caughten, Entei and Suicine. And I caught both of them just by accident, I was just walking around, and poof, suddenly I was attacked, heh.[/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Mnemolth [/i] [B]Well, at the moment there are seven active players, so its kinda full. But many had not made a submission for Round 1, and if they still do not make a submission for Round 2, I'll have the unpleasant task of asking them to retire their characters, or at least give me a [i]good[/i] reason as to why they should stay. We'll see what happens on the 7th when the Round 2 deadline is due. Okay? :) [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] I got'cha mnem'.[/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Deus Ex Machina [/i] [B]When I was 15 or so apparently I looked like either Robin Williams or Harrison Ford (depending who you asked) but I don't think so.. *goes with the flow just for fun* Make that five Disclaimer: This man (Deus Ex Machina) has no idea what he's talking about. He has never seen a picture of James and therefore any comment may be disregarded as you may wish to do so. [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] Done. And I said, as I said, you look like [strike]Milton[/strike] Elton John sort of, heh.[/color] [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by James [/i] [B][color=#507AAC]At least [strike]three[/strike] [strike]four[/strike] five people have told me that I look like Elijah Wood... :help: [/color] [/B][/QUOTE] [spoiler][strike]___=______=______=__[/strike][/spoiler][color=white] [I think I might even start a petition for this...][/color]

[color=red] Ah....[Wonders why he didn't remember this at first]... There's already a thread about this same topic, although rather old, it isn't old enough to be called garbage, heh. So if you want to post anymore of all of y'alls quoteageness, just go [url=http://otakuboards.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=15109]here[/url]. [img]http://cwb.250free.com/Others/gavel.jpg [/img] Have fun, us precious will be us in the backdrop.[/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by James [/i] [B][color=#507AAC]At least [strike]three[/strike] four people have told me that I look like Elijah Wood... :help: [/color] [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] I agree. Make it four...oh, you already have. Good Jeh-Rah. [/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by James [/i] [B][color=#507AAC]I'm really looking forward to FFX-2. It's looking very nice so far. But I hope that they fix a few things. Namely, the lip synching (which was often pretty horrible). And...I hope. Yuna. Will stop. Pausing. Between. Sentences. It's very. Annoying. -_- [/color] [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red]Lol, I'm. With. Jeh-Rah. There. Right? I. Very. Well. Am. Errg..._-_ Yes, I really hope they improve on the lip synching this time around. It really was annoying in the game. From those shots, this game looks very good so far. Let's hope square can deliver.[/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Deus Ex Machina [/i] [B]Surely not.. once you avoid one mistake, everything will have changed and you won't know what to expect any more :p You'd have to do it several times to get it right [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] Actually, I do believe it would be not many times, but almost infinite times. Because, a moment wouldn't be the same exactly, our brains cannot remember every surreal, vivid point of something, and going along with that, a moment is never relived in the exact same manner, posture, thought process, and so on. Also, the new reaction you would cause in a situation would lead to a reaction of that situation to a seemingly different reaction and situation which would lead to reactions and situations from the other situations newly-made parameters and definitions. So basically, it would be an endless, spiralling paradox. So, baically, you'd just be ebbing in time, and just screwing around with pasts, and making them newly-forged pasts, which in turn cause advents upon the future and many consequences and other actions which never spiralled into your life and time on earth. Which would, eventually, lead you back to where you'd go back in time again, and start the process all over again, only in a different situation for you to mess with. As I said, one big, spiralling paradox. Sorry if I lost you there, heh. This such subject of messing with time really enthralls me. [/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Crazy White Boy [/i] [B] That seems more macho to me than wiping out entire populations with a bomb or something. Dig? [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] Cool beans, I dig. Anyways, I'd rather stay dead. I'm just going to leave it at that.[/color]

[color=red] Hah, how sentiments but shallow our years...: Dodges punches:[/color] [spoiler]I hope you move on and are able to piece it all together, dear Cajone-Man.[/spoiler]

[color=red] [spoiler]Dumbledore and Harry are so going to hook up. Oh, and may I mention that I believe Cho and Hermione will, too? Hmm? Sounds like a pretty [i]damn[/i] good story if you ask me.[/spoiler] Hmm...I really should write a fan fic like that...hmmm...:tugs at chin:...hmm...[/color]

[color=red] It was simple, yet I love it for that. It as rhythmical as well, and I liked that. But I do think you overstressed on the rhyming a small bit, and could've gone away from every stanza only being two-line. But other than that, this is a very nice little poem. Especially with the last stanza. 8/10[/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by GinnyLyn [/i] [B][color=royal blue]It's going to be PS. The box art, for one--that's a typical PS box, not a PS2 one. And the graphics--Sony could not get away with graphics like that on PS2--they'd be slaughtered. ^^; Just my thoughts.[/color] [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] Pfft. Probably, but I don't care about graphics. They sure as hell aren't what make a game a game for me. Sure they're nice, good-looking, add something more to a game. But when you get down to it, graphics really mean nothing but a limit to imagination. I most likely thought it was for PSX, so, bleh...it would be really cool if they did release all of the packages into one PS2 game, that would sell like crazy. But then again, I'm only a teen-ager...why should they listen to me...:rolleyes:...?[/color]

[color=red][size=1]I wrote this little poem a really, really, really, long time ago. It's just stuck with me.[/size] [u][b]Underneath[/b][/u] Cloudy water, Endlessly deep For someone to keep. Only underneath that cloudy water will you sleep. [size=1]And recently, I've grown to like these few stanzas as well from my [b]"Death Is For Love"[/b] poem...[/size] Death happens as it happens-- and I have yet to find, why some elude. I have yet to find why dreams are worth more than death's due. For--we all shall die, as flames burn cold, and the ice is cold. For--we all shall die, as flames burn cold. As flames burn cold, and the ice is cold. Death is bitter-sweet. Death is bitter-sweet. Don't cower, it's only defeat. Death is bitter-sweet. Death is bitter-sweet Don't cower, it's only defeat. And as flames burn cold--the ice turns into frostly cold. And don't you cower, it's only defeat And as flames burn cold--the ice burns cold.[/color]

[color=red] Mnemmy, when I will I be able to finally get into this thing?[/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Sara [/i] [size=1].....Wow. wrist [strike]v[/strike][color=red][b]c[/b][/color]utter and James semi-agreed on something. That's scary enough in itself, never mind the content....[/size] [/QUOTE] [color=red] You know, James, it was quite scary. James and wrist cutter, sitting on the lawn...P-L-A-Y-I-N-G...[strike]cards[/strike][spoiler][...Ah, the gutter..][/spoiler]...erm..: Dodges Jamesy:[/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by James [/i] [B][color=#507AAC]Actually, that's not quite true. Wars traditionally bolster the economy -- especially if the nation involved (USA for instance) is winning. The main reason war bolsters the economy is because it creates a level of certainty. Right now, the US markets are jittery because they are uncertain about the future. They don't know when/if something will happen. When the war finally goes ahead and when the first signs of victory appear, the markets will stabilize and strengthen. In addition, the Government spends a great deal of money during the period of a war. Money is spent on ammunition and fuel in particular (billions of dollars). This is another factor that helps to bolster the market. And finally (especially in the case of Iraq), there is the possibility that the nation's oil will become available to the world market once Saddam is gone. This would mean a higher level of oil production and thus, oil prices would drop. This would also mean that cars cost less to run, which puts more money in people's pockets for other things. It's a big cycle. I'm not an economist, but I [i]do[/i] know that in most cases, war has a positive impact on the markets (though obviously it has many negative effects on other areas of the country as well).[/color] [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] Thanks, James. You certainly know more than me. ^_^... But, there still can be negative effects, though. Say we lose the war, lol. :Is going irrational:...[/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by James [/i] [B][color=#507AAC]Actually, wars are traditionally pretty good for the economy...[/color] [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] It goes welly both ways, Jamesy. Wars can be devestating for economy, they cannot. But, in most case I've seen, which isn't much, it does cause the economy to slightly drop down, and even more. Just look at the Great Depression, just look at the past wars...bleh. But, yes, I do admit I'm no master in the world of politics or economics, but heh, this is just how I feel. ^_^[/color]

[color=red] Also, if they make it for PS2, and the use a DVD-ROM, it would also make the loading times faster, as well. But I doubt that'll happen. It'll most likely be for PS.[/color]

[color=red] I didn't watch it, but I saw bits and pieces on the news, and I read an article on it from our newspaper. I agree with him mostly, it seemed it was a pretty just speech. But a speech is nothing, nothing at all. Most of the things he mentioned--I doubt some of them will even be done. That's pretty obvious there. OK, so seeing as I didn't watch it, I really don't have all that much to say. I'd love to see the Hydrogen Powered Cars, though. Because, I think our enviroment [i]should[/i] be something that should be careda about, and most certainly more focused in our world today. But the only part I was against was most of the things he said of Iraq. I don't want to go to war, whatever he says. [b]Especially[/b] not without the UN's recognition, or our allies. Bush is really getting himself deeper into this then he should. I mean, if Iraq's such a damn threat--What about Korea. They have nuclear weapons, why the hell don't we just go to war with them, too? See, it's kind of one sided. Like he's only approaching Iraq, and that's all. Or so it seems. So really, I am really tired with this whole damned thing with Iraq. I know Saddam is very unlikely to just one day pop up magically and say, "Wow, here's all of my weapons of mass destruction, check 'em out, dude." So, I believe our only route now is going to be war...and I really, really, don't think we need a war right now. Our economy's just recoving from 9/11, and what the hell do you think a war is going to do? Obviously, not much good.[/color]

[color=red] Excellent job, Charley-Bob. You'll have to enjoy Fiction, or else I'm going to have to hit you very, very hard.[/color]

[color=red] Shy, you told me to try and critique this. So I'll try. There's not much wrong with it at all, to tell you the truth. Because, you are a good writer, even though you seem to hide out and try and not let that be seen. So I can't really say anything negative about this work you've presented, I'd have to see more to do that, but I can tell you what you did right.[/color] [quote][size=1]?I?m not popular enough to do drugs,"[/quote][/size] [color=red] Right here is something I'd love to tell you you did something well on. This is one the key tools writers use. They [i]show[/i] instead of tell. See, Shy, for this beginning of this article, you could've just said something like this: My parents think I'm doing drugs. I'm not popular enough. Although it would be longer than that perhaps, see my point? By showing instead of just flat out telling, you keep the reader in tune, and keep them reading. [/color] [size=1][quote]What is going on with the Powerade at our school? Every day in between second and third period I go to the Powerade vending machine located by the quad to get a drink, but there is always something wrong with it. Half of the time it is sold out, but when I do manage to catch the machine with some drinks left in it, they always give me the wrong one. I press the yellow Powerade button, and I get the red one; I press the blue Powerade button, and it gives me a bottle of water. I am not trying to waste my dollar on a ?Powerade Slot Machine,? I have a better chance of winning the lottery than getting the correct flavor of Powerade I want.[/size][/quote] [color=red]This is also a great paragraph. It was one of the most interesting to me, and funny out of the entire series of articles and such you posted. This is another tool that is very good--a sense of irony. It makes something as dull and boring as powerade, and gives it seemingly a humorous and funny slant. But you certainly can go too far, and become too ironic, causing the entire article to become watered down, and rather boring. See, that's what writers learn--balance. Balance in that they learn the right way to consistently combine all of their sort of tools, as you might call them, and put bits and pieces of each inside the article, or whatever it may be. This little paragraph also is an anetdote, also. A story within a story. You see, this isn't actually the main focus of the article--at least not to me--it was a focus on how the powerade machine always is empty, and how it bothers you. And also, it is about how expensive some things can be, possibly, too. Anecdotes are another writing tool. They are pretty good ones, too, since people love being told stories... So, thus ends my pointless blurb. I hoped you learned a bit. [spoiler][And I also hope you post more ^_^][/spoiler][/color]

[color=red] As [strike]A[/strike]jeh pointed out, you used some wrong words for the line's structure, which, I'm not sure purposeful or not, detracted from my overall experience of the poem. But, that was really good. Very good, in fact. Much improved over your other works you've posted. So, I'd give you about a 7.8/10 (An 8/10 if you were to fix the mistakes). Keep 'em coming.[/color]

[color=red] Heh, not too bad, not too bad. It certainly has room for improvment, but, don't worry, it all comes in time. Sorry, but I'm rather critical, so don't take me for giving you a pretty low score in comparision to the others so far. I would give it about...a 7.5/10. Still, coming from me, at least...I suppose, that's not that bad. Keep writing! ;)[/color]

[color=red] I look like Mitch...you know, that really popular guy that's now speaking?[/color]