kagome Posted October 21, 2002 Share Posted October 21, 2002 [color=blue]Haiku are extremely short poems written in 17 syllables or fewer, often (but not necessarily) arranged in three lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables each. Haiku make use of concrete imagery or sensations, not abstractions or metaphors, and are often (though not always) concerned with the natural world. [/color] Anyone intrested in making haiku? [b]this is mine:[/b] Just a simple wish Can make a child happy Brings a smilie face Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zidane11 Posted October 21, 2002 Share Posted October 21, 2002 I hate haiku's. I had to make a few of them in school. I really suck at it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted October 22, 2002 Share Posted October 22, 2002 With a gentle breeze The leaves drop from the bare tree Creating Beauty... It's not good but it was done in about 2 minutes so oh well Personally I'm split on Haikus...Its either they are really beuatiful or they are horrible. It takes one mistake to butcher and make the whole thing sound choppy, so I respect anyone who can truly make a Haiku how it was ment to be! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Corey Posted October 22, 2002 Share Posted October 22, 2002 What am I doing? Why do I live in this place? Why can't I just die? As you may already be able to tell, i'm on one of my random depression nights... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Heaven's Cloud Posted October 22, 2002 Share Posted October 22, 2002 [color=indigo]We had an old thread that was a haiku game...but it was old and this is new...so here it goes Dead leaves fall from high discontent in the autumn they seek springs escape[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kagome Posted October 22, 2002 Author Share Posted October 22, 2002 Little woodpeckers chuck chuck! How long can they chuck When they have no teeth Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Heaven's Cloud Posted October 23, 2002 Share Posted October 23, 2002 [color=indigo] Fortune fades away My bowl of rice is shallow Yet I am content[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kagome Posted October 23, 2002 Author Share Posted October 23, 2002 Morning, the sun rises The birds sing: chirp chirp chirp For a new spring day Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vegeta rocker Posted October 23, 2002 Share Posted October 23, 2002 im not good at them so i will spare all of your minds. Maybe later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boo Posted October 23, 2002 Share Posted October 23, 2002 Woohoo! i didnt notice Vegeta Rocker anymore! :p A sheeps an animal with wool keeping him warm in the winter protected for pain :p Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kagome Posted October 23, 2002 Author Share Posted October 23, 2002 The soft water flows Softly, slowly, through its path As the life went by Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Death Posted October 24, 2002 Share Posted October 24, 2002 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by DuoGod of Death [/i] [B]With a gentle breeze The leaves drop from the bare tree Creating Beauty... It's not good but it was done in about 2 minutes so oh well Personally I'm split on Haikus...Its either they are really beuatiful or they are horrible. It takes one mistake to butcher and make the whole thing sound choppy, so I respect anyone who can truly make a Haiku how it was ment to be! [/B][/QUOTE] I don't think your haiku was bad, as a matter of fact I liked it. Here's mine: A nice pleasant thought Comes to mind, upon this time Here at long life's end Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 Hey thanks for the compliment, and I'm not trying to be playing favorites but personally I think yours is the best! I liked it alot! Also Heavan Cloud's was good! Hm...Now to think of another Haiku... Whisping around free Carelessly around the world Human minds wander Ugh...worse than the first oh well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 [color=red]I rather loathe Haikus, but hey, I'll give it a shot. [i]Rippled rips of rip a crimson light upon thy placed wound falling dreams of uncouth test [/i] See...I suck at Haikus. It is to short of room to convey anything that is a strongly feral emotion.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 Ah but the contrary is true. It is perfect length to express true emotions. Its just in the ability of the writer. I myself can not truly write a Haiku like it is supposed to be written and don't expect anyone here to just for the simple fact that it is an art that must be worked on long and hard, but when perfected is the most beautiful of all poetry. Its funny how so few words can potray such strong emotion... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sere Tuscumbia Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 And now I get mad. We had to do science poems and I did six Haikus. I am the Haiku goddess. But, Mr. Bond (evil rubber duckie he is) didn't give us our poems back, and now I only remember 2. One really, and part of one other. Edit. The minute after I was forced off the internet, I remembered the whole haiku. ^^;; Anthropomorphic Human from to non-live things New words every day! Organic compounds Chains and rings and many things Carbon skeletons *~*~~`` And just an improv one: Posting a reply. Why does a poem go quick? Only the few know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Asphyxia Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 [color=darkred] Bah, I'll give it a shot. Their innocent lives, Hopes dashed, all ruined, lost for good All because of war. Meh, not exactly great, I know. But easier enough...I think ^.^[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mnemolth Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 Good effort everyone! :D Here's something for those who are really interested in Haiku. [url]http://www.millikin.edu/haiku/aha/harr.html#response[/url] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Biida Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 Your eyes are lovely Your lips so soft and perfect Your voice my calling Love comes like a breeze A soft whisper to your soul Tender kisses sweet I watch the blood flow From my wrists, arms, and my soul I savor the pain And that's all I can think of before my brain begins to rot from lack of sleep. *looks at the clock which says 3:07am* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by DuoGod of Death [/i] [B]Ah but the contrary is true. It is perfect length to express true emotions. Its just in the ability of the writer. I myself can not truly write a Haiku like it is supposed to be written and don't expect anyone here to just for the simple fact that it is an art that must be worked on long and hard, but when perfected is the most beautiful of all poetry. Its funny how so few words can potray such strong emotion... [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] You are very right. It depends on the writer, and practice. I'm certain that if I started writing Haikus for about a month, I would get at least one good one out of the bunch. But I find Haikus to be limiting to me. I don't like having to follow a set amount of rules because it ruins my creative flare when I write.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Boo Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 A sheep is soft. Like a pillow. Ready to be hugged :p Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted October 25, 2002 Share Posted October 25, 2002 [color=red] [i]Deeply folded skin of purge become but nothing of a pain learned and fall upon what seeds[/i] I tried...;)[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kagome Posted October 26, 2002 Author Share Posted October 26, 2002 beautiful sunset No matter how beautiful It is still just sunset Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted October 26, 2002 Share Posted October 26, 2002 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by AnimeLover [/i] [B][color=red] [i]Deeply folded skin of purge become but nothing of a pain learned and fall upon what seeds[/i] I tried...;)[/color] [/B][/QUOTE] See you arn't bad! And yes I see what you are saying and respect it. Sorry I don't have another Haiku, even if I thought they were good, I just can't think at the moment, just got home from the Highschool football game...:drunk: OH and Britty I like the second Haiku you did Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Heaven's Cloud Posted October 26, 2002 Share Posted October 26, 2002 [color=indigo]Fields of wheat whisper Secrets of the Harvest moon Our plate bountiful.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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