Mitch

[color=red] Very nice. The shading especially in the hair I found good and well. Seems you have some talent in this foray. 7.9/10.[/color]

[color=red] That is a very busy wallpaper. And I like it for that reason. I could stare at it for awhile and still pick things out. It's good. 7.5/10.[/color]

[color=red] At first glance, I really didn't like it. But after tasting and sloshing it around my taste buds for awhile and viewing it more closely, I find I do really like it. The blend of colors is well and just there. The pink is wonderful and makes it one nice, tight, wonderful little package. I love the sleekness of it--all the lines and such. 8.6/10.[/color]

[color=red] I hate that cut off corner in the bottom right. Otherwise, wow, I really like it. The dark blues are wonderful. It could use some more touches here and there, more going on, but I like it. 8/10.[/color]

[color=red] The text could be better, yes, but otherwise, this is nice. I love the blue hues. 7.8/10.[/color]

[color=red] Too bright and too faded. Also too simplistic for what I believe you were trying to convey. It needs more nice colors that are good on the eyes. It's just too faded. 6.5/10[/color]

[color=red] I like it. It's so...abstract and different.[/color]

[color=red] I was going top check them out...but seeing as my parents are being such bastards, I shall have to force you to give me some.[/color]

[color=red][b][u]Third Eye[/b][/u] Lashes came out to watch me play Why is it running away Light shimmers the eyes' cloudy dismay Lashes came out to watch me play I ask again, "Why are you running away?" Open up open today "Why are you running away," I say Eyelids' flutter as the layer sways Like the lipid morose of the flowers' belay Prying open my third eye Harder and harder as I try "Why are you running away?" The lid runs I rip it vain Permeate inter smell the bosom's bay Third eye crossing falling away My fingers dig deeper in abrasion Blood congeals clots in ruination Prying and prying this eyelids' flutter incantation Asphyxia stigmata's desperation Paranoid paralyzed schizoid virulent paraplegic God-eyes angel-demon crutch the twirl-sand tick Its hair clod lashes its crutch-twig pupils thick Conjoined closed its dilates inflict Scamp scab cling to the side Pry open the third eye Light shine pestle infested sky Pry it open I still ask why Reach into the skin Look at all the spirals Contour the miles Pry open ferment the aisles Look at all the spirals Dig crush sheave shove Prick creak bruise sleuth Open pry finger hove Blink lapse falter dilute In the wake of the spiral Consume you choose you In the wake of the spiral Consume you choose you It shall be will be As it consumes you chooses you It shall be will be Reach exert crush squeeze Let go invert push impede It shall be will be Finger it so hard so cold Pry it open so barred so old It shall be will be Prying open my third eye Asking and asking why Came out to watch you play Why are you running away It opens as I close the lids Runs away as I try to give It is meant this tinge Runs away as I give Look at those miles All those spirals I thought you were hiding I saw you running away Prying open my third eye Dig pry answers why Somewhere there inside Lashes came out to play Hear my voice so far away "Why are you running away?" Falls as I say close its lashes lay Prying open my third eye Brush it all fall away[/color]

[color=red] Uh..does this have anything to do with that thread Ajeh made awhile back? ;Blinks: Anyways, disease is a horrible thing. I hope it doesn't get any much worse.[/color]

[color=red] It's a good idea. One of the best I've heard in quite awhile. Hopefully it'll go.[/color]

[color=red] Yeah. Holy crap. This is old. Please, don't do anything like this again. Your intentions are good...but really. Think. I don't know what my favorite version is. I've only been here for a year. This April 9th I believe will be a full year...[/color]

[color=red] It's nothing mind blowing, but it's not horrible, either. I'd say it's fine.[/color]

[color=red][size=1]Quickly written is as so, but something nonetheless[/size] [b][u]The Chimera's Kiss Buried[/b][/u] Digging interrred digging therein Dogs' probscises take the soot Watch the tear rapture in Third eye blinking verberated morbidly thin To tear is to tear; this is so Watch them bury; watch them To tear is to tear; water grimmy glows Wail them--,for the chaste; piety vehement the stem Drip-drop taste the red The Chimera's kiss bled Wail them for the chaste Clover the green; the dogs' dye-red meat Interred the exhumed Cadaver's carver skeletal moon The Chimera stalking; the dogs' efferent howl Sigh here; kiss the brow The Chimera's kiss numbly cold the clefts Take this grave and may it rest Dig on proboscis the death [/color]

[color=red] I [i]hate[/i] AOL....[/color]

[color=red] Not too bad. Nice to see another poem from you, VR, it's been quite awhile. It wasn't anything impressive--nothing too poetic--but I love your constant enjambment and the overall somewhat simple way your poems go. 7.6/10. It's great...until the end. The ending wasn't too definite and..dreamcast? It just doesn't fit the overall poem. But good work. Always nice to see you still writing. [/color]

[color=red] Your style of writing is pretty average. But I do suppose you've just really begun developing it--so thus, it will be some time before you come out with your own unique style. It wasn't too bad. But mainly, I found that I lost interest. The story you've presented is such a cliche. But overlooking that and looking at your writing in itself: I found it wasn't anything overally mind blowing, but you show a good talent. If you are plannng on developing this, I would love to see it happen. Your writing is pretty average-again, always try new vocabulary and let writing grow on you. Steal styles from other writer's works, especially those you like. Combine them all into a style of your own. So basically--this is a pretty average story. If I were to rate it I would give it an 6/10. My advice to you is to keep writing and reading and you shall continue to improve from this point you've reached The main thing I didn't like about this story is that there wasn't enough really happening. Most of it was just straight forward, dull dialogue. But it is only the beginning. I'd love to see you write more of this--see where you can take it. Keep writing. ^_^[/color]

[color=red] It's too monotone and not original enough. I'm all with pomme--it needs to be deeper. Deeper in that it needs to be abstract. It needs to have some wonderfully descriptive words that bring you into the feelings you're feeling. More poetic. Find something that relates to your feeling--something utterly abstract. Something that [i]screams[/i] your feelings out and gives an utter and powerful taste of your feeling to the reader. I give it a 3.5/10. It's not my tastes for a poem. At all. But don't feel discouraged--I started off on the same end of poetry as you.[/color]

[color=red] Count my whole-heartedly in. I'm so sick of this forum being as dead as it is. I'd also like it if everyone could maybe put something in their sig advertising this and proclaiming you are one of the few, the proud, the many. :Shrug:[/color]

[color=red] Geh, here I was thinking it was going to be something of remote interest to my eyes. But I am badly mistaken. The banner itself isn't too bad. It just doesn't blend together well, though.[/color]

[color=red] Looks very promising. Too bad I don't have a Gamecube, eh...[/color]

[color=red] I can't wait for Summer.[/color]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Sara [/i] [B][size=1]I'm fairly sure this used to happen... Red text at the bottom of the main page, or something. And/or "You have x new PMs and xx total PMs in all your folders. The maximum is yy PMs." Eh...[/size] [/B][/QUOTE] [color=red] Your algebraic language confuses me. Yes, all we have now is an E-mail that is sent, as GinnyLyn said. It would certainly be nice if a better feature to this could be developed, but it isn't that bad of a problem? Is it?[/color]

[color=red][b][u]The Chimera's Kiss[/b][/u] Morbid wails The Chimera stalks Mending the wall the vine mirrors on the leaflet Refractored the trepidated hoof halts Dilapidated white the bark and inhumed nutrient The loneliest word you'll hear Cries of if only the cadaver's touch Malignancy The Chimera stalks the fear The necromancer fains known here The emaciated espalier tremble with his touch The breath of The Chimera so numbly cold The loneliest word you'll ever know If only if only emulsify this soul The Chimera stalks mollified white the bark equivocal Eminently if only it was so So many wails so many cries in the dark The opaque emaciated feebles the emptiest anoint This Chimera is a terrible kiss those lips efferent bark A kiss is a terrible thing to waste an anomalous delight The loneliest kiss you'll ever know So empty, the abhor so terrible the kiss to waste The Chimera stalks his eyes rough bark aglow Dead?hear the dead?come closer cognizance the taste If only if only it was so Walk in this grave The Chimera calls Hear the necrotized moan and wail so You shouldn't tremble when we touch the walls Kiss The Chimera's ether taste the whole The loneliest realization you'll ever know The Chimera's kiss if only if only it was so A kiss is a terrible thing to waste The Chimera's kiss anomalous in delight I take your hand the folds imprinted and hark The Chimera and our lips are part If only if only it was so Engulfed the fire is abhor in taste The tomb is later than you see to haste And a kiss is a terrible thing to waste The Chimera's kiss brethren in twixt Exhumed inhumed in incised wick The loneliest word you'll ever know If only if only it was so[/color]

[color=red] Justin, although this war [i]isn't[/i] about 9/11, underneath, it sure as hell is. Just look--look how we mainly came to this war. It was, in essence, 9/11. And also, of course, the Gulf War, but that's besides my point. We did get to this war in essence from 9/11.[/color]